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I'm totally chuffed that one of my scripts has been made for the first time. Like most people, I've had loads of emails since joining here from film students interested in filming scripts, nothing has materialized, but finally this one's been made.
The guy filmed it for his class. Just read the shooting draft, seen the end credits and listened to the theme tune. All looks and sounds pretty good so I'm optimistic about the final film. Was pretty interesting to read his version of the script, with camera angles and the like - everything was pretty much as I'd visualised it myself.
Should be getting it in the next day or so, so once I learn how to post it onto the old interweb, I'll put a link up here.
Thanks for the congrats everyone. I've got the first part emailed over this morning but the picture quality isn't really good enough to show at the moment. I've asked him what's up with it and just waiting to hear back.
I might have to wait until I get the dvd before putting it up here.
Well, the quality issue is due to the compression of the file. The file was too big to email so he had to reduce the quality to 50%. Unfortunately, because he's entering it in a couple of festivals and comps I won't be able to post it on the interweb for a while.
I should be getting the dvd in a couple of weeks and I'll let you know what it's like. As soon as I can post it, I'll provide a link.
Got the dvd yesterday and I'm pretty impressed with it. Not really much else to say apart from I'll post a link as soon as I'm able to.
Quick shout out in case the same guy contacts anyone else from here, as he obviously stuck to his word and was good to deal with. His name's Evan Hoffpauir.
Congrats on the production. One thing that I do with the films that I can't put way out in the open, is upload them to vimeo, but as a password protected video. That way, only people who know about it can access it.
Cheers Mike, I'll run it by him. Also, if anyone knows of a good release form on the web that states I am allowing him to use the script but not to own it, then we're after one. The one he sent me sounds a bit wrong.
Ste, send me the release you have (email's in profile) and I'll take a look at it. Could be a matter of just a few odd words, since things like that are usually pretty straight forward.
That looks great ste - you ended up with an interesting director. Liked what he did with the camera, if he uses those moves as part of the storytelling then this will be fantastic.
GOD DAMN IT! THEY TOOK AWAY CREEPY NARRATIVE BEAR! NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Well, the bear is still in there but he doesn't talk. He explained that he was going to lose the talking bear when he first asked to use the script to be fair. I was going to quote The SImpsons to him and say 'you can't lose the bear, the bear's his heart' but thought better of it.
Toby, the film's been in some festivals (not sure how many or which ones) but hasn't placed so far. That was the reason he didn't want to put it on the internet, incase it caused a DQ. I've had my copy since before Christmas.
Cheers anyway, I'll provide a link to the full thing as soon he provides me with one.
I've managed to change it to an MOV now...I think. I've tried emailing before when it was a VOB file. I'll try sending it again now if that's ok, cheers.
I've managed to change it to an MOV now...I think. I've tried emailing before when it was a VOB file. I'll try sending it again now if that's ok, cheers.
I actually really liked this short, felt that it was well made. Direction was pretty decent, and the music... Well, the music IMO made it. I'm glad there wasn't much dialogue, as I felt that the women couldn't act very well... The lines she did say sounded a bit forced. But nothing major, as there was very little dialogue. Felt that the bear VO would have fitted well though... I missed that part.
But yeah, you should be proud of yourself - This short did your great script justice.
It definitely had good production value, and I didn't have that hard of a time with the actress myself, although the crying parts were a bit rough. That's not all that easy to do though, so I can't go too much into that one.
I don't recall reading the short, but were the characters always this young? They seem a bit on the young side for what they're going through given their situation.
Well done getting this made. The music was really good... and, well it was all really good. Acting could have been slightly better, and there were a few dodgy angles here and there, but overall I would be very happy with how this turned out.
Yeah this is my first script produced. 'Coma' is in preproduction now.
I think the guy did a good job with this and yeah agree with everyone about the music. Would have been interesting to see how the bear VO would have looked, but what can you do?
Mike
In the script, the guy is middle-aged and the woman is in her late thirties. Alot is told through flashback when the guy is in his late twenties though.
I never read your script, and based on the video alone, the story seems a bit thin for a ten minute video. I see people mentioning you had lines for the teddy bear, which I think could have improved it. As it is, this feels like it was stretched out too long, and the drama started getting tedious as a result.
I thought the cinematography was amazing, and that the music was quite good as well. The woman couldn't act at all, though. It seemed like she was laughing when she was crying, which was really distracting.
I never read your script, and based on the video alone, the story seems a bit thin for a ten minute video. I see people mentioning you had lines for the teddy bear, which I think could have improved it.
Yeah, the original script was about 6 pages long. The lines by the bear kind of finished off each scene. If you're interested there's a link to the script in my sig.
The cinematography was awesome. The angles, transitions and use of positive and negative space was really terrific. He filled his frames just right, and used angles to their fullest. Well done.
The music was first rate, and the way it was placed throughout the film worked great!
The use of the teddy bear as the object of how there love became strained, then went out with the trash worked pretty well. I too wonder how it would have been if they'd left the bear's dialogue in place. 'Course, the majority of folks who will see this will never know. That's the curse of reading scripts before a film is made.
Congratulations, ste, it's a terrific piece of work and will look great in your portfolio!
Wow I think we have another Sam Mendes (I think that's how you pronounce his name) in the making here. This short was gorgeous.
This dude loves tragic drama and films it well. Which is why I'm guessing he chose your script Ste cause it is the perfect showcase to show off his dramatic direction chop.
and for everyone mourning the lose of creepy narrative bear I say relax. That bear was just words on paper and I can't see why Ste can't just incorporate that idea into another one of his scripts that might get picked up and produced then we will get to see the furry little critter on film and rejoice.
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