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George Willson
Posted: June 7th, 2010, 5:13pm Report to Moderator
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The second installment of the Fempiror Chronicles, Genesis of the Mutation, is now available for purchase at Amazon.com or from CreateSpace.

The base price is 9.68, and you can get one thing or another based on which site you visit. At CreateSpace, you can get a 15% discount by using discount code H63WMLZU. This code is compatible with the first book as well and you can order them together by adding one to your cart, and then visiting the CreateSpace link for the first book to add the other.

On Amazon, if you're planning on doing more shopping, both title are eligible for free shipping on orders over $25.

Like the first book, there are considerable changes between the novelization and the screenplay which is still posted on SimplyScripts, though not as many as the first time around. With the backstory out of the the way, this one is quite the emotional roller coaster.

Synopsis: David Taylor investigates the emergence of a new evolution of Fempiror.

Ten years after his transmutation, David Taylor has trained ceaselessly as a Rastem warrior. Having earned the trust of his order, they send him to a distant city after discovering that the Tepish have been actively developing a revision to the Fempiror serum. When he discovers the full truth behind the new serum, he is forced into an unlikely alliance in a vain attempt to end the Mutations before they can spread.


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George,

I've been perusing your Fempiror screenplays.  The first two won't open.  Reads file damaged.   Are they available somewhere else?  

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George - Just dropping in to say congrats and great job with your novels. I will be getting my hands on a copy, but thought I send along my praise. It's a great achievement to finish a novel, even greater to publish it.

Stew


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Congrats GW,

Keep it up.

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George,

I've been perusing your Fempiror screenplays.  The first two won't open.  Reads file damaged.   Are they available somewhere else?  


Just checked and they didn't open for me either. In fact, it appears that none of the scripts are working. I reuploaded the screenplays, and they still aren't opening, even if I right-click and download. I even tried in a different browser than what I'm using and they still won't open. I'm kind of at a loss as to what's going on here.

I'll keep looking into it, and post again when I have it sorted out.


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Well done with finishing it and good luck with the sales.
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Just checked and they didn't open for me either. In fact, it appears that none of the scripts are working. I reuploaded the screenplays, and they still aren't opening, even if I right-click and download. I even tried in a different browser than what I'm using and they still won't open. I'm kind of at a loss as to what's going on here.

I'll keep looking into it, and post again when I have it sorted out.


Just tried to load these this morning, and they're working now, at least in Google Chrome.

Thanks for the well wishes so far. Need to now get my butt in gear to write the third one.


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Congratulations George!

Good luck with the sales and also really cool that it's available at the library!  


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I'll have to check the shipping first on both sites because usually Amazon.com hates Canadians.

I haven't ordered from the .com site in like two years now because they charge more than the UK store which makes no sense to me when other American sites charge realistic amounts.

The last book was the first book I bought in years that wasn't from a bargain bin for 25 cents.


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What, you multiply?

Last I heard you where shooting a feature film and all of a sudden you released a novel.

I really enjoyed the first book and so will pick up this one, but maybe when you have all the books published and the series is complete.

Which I have to ask, will Fempiror be a trilogy or a sprawling, endless series like Wheel Of Time (shudder) I hope its a trilogy cause three is a good number.  


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What, you multiply?

Last I heard you where shooting a feature film and all of a sudden you released a novel.

I really enjoyed the first book and so will pick up this one, but maybe when you have all the books published and the series is complete.

Which I have to ask, will Fempiror be a trilogy or a sprawling, endless series like Wheel Of Time (shudder) I hope its a trilogy cause three is a good number.  


I am planning a feature, but was working another project to completion before I start getting into it. Writing the novels is what I do with the rest of my time since you can't be planning all the time.

As for the length, there is an end to the series that I've already planned out, but it isn't three books. It will be endless until I decide to write the finale, but not necessarily sprawling. At the moment, I have enough material for another 3 or 4 books, and other than the final, I have storylines and ideas for over a half dozen more at least, depending on how intricate those storylines get.

Yet, there is a focus to the series. The first four books basically form a canon to themselves and represent the first part of the original idea that inspired it all to begin with. From the fifth onward, is what happens next and represents the second part of that original idea. The growing story has been a sort of "I told you that story to tell you this one" kind of deal. I wrote the ending first and then wrote everything else to build into it so it would make sense.

I wrote the story to book 4 first, then wrote book 1 to set it up, book 2 to transition into 4, then 3 to transition the time and events better between 2 and 4, so 4 didn't have a huge flashback to explain how we got there. Then I had to get from 4 to the end which is where the teleplay series came from that I'll rewrite rather heavily into its part of the book series.

I could literally spend the rest of my life writing Fempiror books, but I know at some point, I'll decide it's done. At that point, I'll write the one with the Tolkien-inspired title "The End Of All Things," and I'll let anyone else who wants to take it from there. So there's an ending, but I just have to get there. So there is an ending, but I just have to get there.


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Possible Spoilers!!!!

I've been holding back, but I want to say that I have some strong recommendations for the first Fempiror. I might be the most guilty on this site of recent, for smashing the bits off, but I don't want to see this happen on a regular basis (for members that have the capability) that are serious about their work.

The recommendation firstly here is to hold back and not try to push out a third book. You need to take a serious and detailed look at "the writing" in the first book.

You have such a good premise and you did a superior job in the set-up; but truthfully,
it's fallen apart in the middle, George. I wouldn't say so if it weren't true.

I need to finish my work at the end of my critique and then I'll revisit the beginning.

Honestly, I can see how this was changed/adapted from a screenplay. Two totally different animals.

You have some star material here. Don't punch it out there because you're in a hurry. Better to take your time. Relax.

It will be much better in the end.

What I've done is taken some notes and examples that you can work with. Part of the problem I think is that of "your logic". Doesn't it suck the big banana?! The thing that helps-- impedes!!! I hear ya!!! Anyways....

I'll try and get something out to you in the next couple of weeks. It's been a hard go for me as of late because our Merry Cat is fighting with cancer. We've had her since the late 90's and she's our baby.

My recommendation for Fempiror right now is that it needs a shot in the arm in the character department. Nothing contrived or added on. We need the real deal. We need to see Beth and her longing for David. We need to see David together with her in the middle of this book, telling her the score, the reality, and letting them have intimacy, knowing, the full while, they must part.

I've got some detailed notes and will make more.

Keep it up, George. I see stars in your future!!!

Luvya,

Sandra



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that's some valid recommendations Sandra but isn't the book cooked, published and ready for consumption? Isn't it it a bit late for tinkering? Besides how do we know George hasn't already addressed the issues between Beth and David and developed it more in the second book?

I must admit I am dissapointed that your story will span over so many books. From a readers point of view that costs money and a stack of books can get expensive.

I can't even go to my local Libary to read your books which is a bummer.    



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I consider that if there are parts in the first book that really need tweaking, that tweaking is possible. However, before I rewrite anything, I take in multiple comments and see where they all gel. If there's what amounts to a consensus that there is a serious problems with a single, specific part, than I'll look into it. I've had several one off comments here and there, but few agreements on any big issues.

I do honestly take quite a bit of time on these. At least for me. I did both of them about the same way. I wrote the first draft, let it set for a few weeks, re-read it and corrected it, passed it to my wife where she read it and ripped it apart, I rewrote it and re-read it, then I submitted it, ordered a proof and read it again, passed it to my wife again who tore it apart again, I rewrote it and reread it, printed out a final copy, my wife read it out loud to me so I can hear it and we continue to make comments on it, then I make a final pass on it, and submit it. That whole process took about 9 months each time.

I can assure you that the development between David and Beth is resolved in the second book. (If Bert is reading, he just chuckled to himself and probably nodded.)

As for the span of the stories, I tell the story as it needs to be told. I have several major plot points for a big picture, and in order to reach those points, certain things have to happen at certain points in time, and as has been mentioned, those points can't be rushed. From the very beginning, I planned the Fempiror universe as a place where there are unlimited story possibilities, and my very, very first outline contained five distinct story plots. While the story as a whole has a conclusion, it was never intended as a trilogy.

As for the availability of the book, since it's self-published at this point, I can't fix the library thing. I toted a copy to my local library so it's available for local consumption. I went this route to see if I could generate a buzz for it to attract publishers, since none of them wanted to go past my query (as usual). And as usual, the reaction of a lot of the people who have read it is really positive. I told a friend of mine about the second book a little in advance, and he received his copy on Tuesday. He was halfway through it yesterday, and said it's better than the first.

Don't think that I won't listen to comments because I always find them valuable. Whether I go back and fix something in the first book and mark it as a subsequent edition, or just alter something going forward, I take comments seriously. I always have. That's what got the series to the point it is now.

And Sandra, your vague comments have made me curious about your specifics. I'm wondering what exactly you're referring to with some of your references.


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Quoted from George Willson


And Sandra, your vague comments have made me curious about your specifics. I'm wondering what exactly you're referring to with some of your references.


There are a lot of details in writing style that need correction that I will send to you when I complete my considerations and recommendations. Although one might on surface see a sparse writing style, there is plenty in here that isn't necessary at all and I will give such examples.

It really is a big deal I know to get something through so many phases of revisions and edits. Even with several people reading and critiquing. I'll do my best here.

Sandra




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