Ohh she photographs the killer. Okay, disregard the whole clue thing. Just wanted there to be something that explains how she's a central player in all of this and that'll do it. I would try to include catching evidence of the crime in the logline as Libby suggested. But I like Robert's one too.

I don't know, I like them all!

When are you gonna stop teasing us and let us read the script??

Thanks, Libby and Robert. Awesome suggestions. I’m really partial to the one Kevin gave me, that’s likely the one I’ll run with.

Quoted from MarkItZero When are you gonna stop teasing us and let us read the script??

I’m actually sending this off to a producer on Tuesday, so fingers crossed big time. If all goes well,  I hope you never get a chance to read the script. Instead, watch the movie.

I'll take a stab. Kind of rusty at this, however.

A young woman interning for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes his target when she suspects he murdered his wife.

The photography part only needs to be included if it is essential to the plot. For example, if she stumbles onto evidence while doing her work. Or does she witness the murder? If so, that should be in there.

A young intern for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes a target after she witnesses him killing his wife.

A young photographer working for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes a target after capturing evidence he murdered his wife.

Quoted from LC After landing her dream job as photographer for a wealthy client a young woman unwiitingly captures evidence of a brutal crime on film, making her not only the prime suspect in a murder, but also the target of a deranged killer.

I like this one, but I'd drop the bit about landing her dream job. It's incidental and doesn't add to the hook. Also you make two references to the one crime, which isn't necessary. Otherwise, it has all the ingredients that make for a good log line; it just needs a little trimming. Remember, 25-30 words.

A young photographer unwittingly captures evidence of a brutal murder on film, making her both a prime suspect for the police and a target for the real killer.

Quoted from Lon I like this one, but I'd drop the bit about landing her dream job. It's incidental and doesn't add to the hook. Also you make two references to the one crime, which isn't necessary. Otherwise, it has all the ingredients that make for a good log line; it just needs a little trimming. Remember, 25-30 words. A young photographer unwittingly captures evidence of a brutal murder on film, making her both a prime suspect for the police and a target for the real killer.

that's it.

A young photographer unwittingly captures evidence of a brutal murder on film, making her both a prime suspect for the police and a target for the real killer.

Yeah. Like that one too

Is this the best thread for a log line, perhaps, ever?

Quoted from leitskev I'll take a stab. Kind of rusty at this, however. A young woman interning for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes his target when she suspects he murdered his wife. The photography part only needs to be included if it is essential to the plot. For example, if she stumbles onto evidence while doing her work. Or does she witness the murder? If so, that should be in there. A young intern for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes a target after she witnesses him killing his wife. A young photographer working for a wealthy entrepreneur becomes a target after capturing evidence he murdered his wife.

Nice!

Ooh, is he the actual Killer? And she a witness?
I just assumed she got photographic evidence after the fact, not necessarily caught him in the act of killing her. Assumed it was just some incriminating evidence she discovers on film.

It helps when you've read the script.  

Good luck, Stevo!

Quoted from Lon I like this one, but I'd drop the bit about landing her dream job. It's incidental and doesn't add to the hook. Also you make two references to the one crime, which isn't necessary. Otherwise, it has all the ingredients that make for a good log line; it just needs a little trimming. Remember, 25-30 words.

I see where you're coming from, Lon.
I just thought the 'dream job' element added to all she has to lose. If it was her big break then...
Dream job turns into nightmare, but her life is on the line too.

As Robert said, plenty of action on this thread.
Which means the script itself sounds like a goodie with lots of appeal.

A weary message board, goes insane in an attempt to write a single log line, sending them all after the writer of the script who won't post it.

Quoted from LC Nice! Ooh, is he the actual Killer? And she a witness? I just assumed she got photographic evidence after the fact, not necessarily caught him in the act of killing her. Assumed it was just some incriminating evidence she discovers on film. It helps when you've read the script.   Good luck, Stevo!

She gets a blurry shot of the killer, but later it’s a bracelet on the suspects wrist that will give them away.

And the killer is one of the cops, so there’s that.

Quoted from LC As Robert said, plenty of action on this thread. Which means the script itself sounds like a goodie with lots of appeal.

I sure as hell hope you’re right.

By the way, I’ll be starting up a synopsis page next.