Hello.

This is the current draft of the logline for a horror miniseries screenplay I completed recently. I will share Part 1 on this forum, as a Halloween treat.  So be on the lookout for it

When ancient horrors stir beneath his rural home, an aging geologist must uncover the truth behind his fractured memories, before a sinister cosmic entity consumes his sanity - and everyone he loves.

Your suggestions are welcome.

Ahoy Aaron--

When ancient horrors stir beneath his rural home, an aging geologist must uncover the truth behind his fractured memories, before a sinister cosmic entity consumes his sanity - and everyone he loves.

1) OK, I'm getting Lovecraftian vibes with the “ancient horrors,� plus “cosmic entity.�

2) And you've got the key elements: the Protag,  stakes, a central mystery.

3) However, perhaps a slight tightening can boost punch.  The reason I say this...“uncover the truth behind his fractured memories...â€�  

While it is intriguing but a bit abstract. Wait for other's to weigh-in.

That's my opinion, such as it is... -Andrea

Quoted Text 1) OK, I'm getting Lovecraftian vibes with the “ancient horrors,� plus “cosmic entity.�

Exactly. It's a cosmic horror / drama.

The protagonist suffers from "holes" in his memory, which he thinks are symptoms of early dementia.

Thanks for the tip.

Cheers.

Hey Aaron,

This is an interesting premise you have here, and I do actually like the log line you have created - it did grab me

One thing I did note is that it could be argued that the "threat" is repeated with "ancient horrors" and "sinister cosmic entity". Do we need both to set the tone?

For me, "ancient horrors" does enough - I know something very evil is at play.

So, I feel you've got an opportunity to tighten this ... if you would want to