This was a pretty quick a fun read. Format, story, characters, everything was great.

The only thing I found was that there was a typo at the end of page 2:

CARL (V.O.)
Each of my calls would documented. - Shouldn't there be a "be" in there?

Anyway, I don't have much time to review, but like I said, it was a great read!

-Chris

Chris was referring to Suicide  , one of my short scripts.  Not sure why he posted a comment here.  Chris, can you post something for me on the Suicide thread?  Bump it up to the top of the list?


Phil

Quoted from Shelton If Whitey is visiting Nick in prison, that sounds more like they would be sitting across from each other, separated by glass, and talking through telephone recievers.

As Whitey is there on bureau business, these arrangements would be allowed.


Phil

The place Mike describes is called 'Visitation Area' in 'The life of David Gale' script.

In the script I'm working on, it would be a one-on-one talk, in private.  The big visitation room wouldn't be appropriate.


Phil

I'd say use either interview or interrogation room.  If I saw either one of those I would probably picture the same thing in my head anyway.  Is there anything special about the room that you're planning on describing, or is it just a table with a couple of chairs?

If you can promise a rabid monkey will leap from the closet, I'll be the first to read it.

The rabid monkey was in The Burnout.  And it was a clothes hamper.  Didn't you read it?

Actually, there was no rapid monkey.  Nor was there a hamper.  You should still read it, though.


Phil

I read that a loooooong time ago.

A little off topic here, but not really...

How far along is Tower, anyway?

Is that still the title?

Just curious (and offering up a free chance for ya' to plug away haha).

I'm a little better than a third of the way through the script (first draft).

In this sequel, Whitey learns a little bit about what the Citizens had in mind for those from Project: Interface.  It's not just another opportunity for Whitey to kick ass.


Phil