Hey guys,
    This will be a long one.

First off:  Confession.  Don called me today to check up on me.  It was really nice and thanks to all of you who were concerned.  Last year, I was diagnosed with bone liquifications in my bones.  This is consistent with Lupus and or Rheumatoid Arthritis.  As with everything else, there is nothing that can be done ATM.  The pains in my bones are horrific from time to time.

Basically, I take regular pain meds for the structural pain that I am in, and can't take the only thing that would help the bone pain: Medical Marijuana.  Sadly MM doesn't do anything for structural pain.  And no doctor will give you both.  So, now, when all 3 act up, and Lupus fully explains my energy issues, well, that's my life.  It can really suck.

I kinda over-did it.  Taxed my neck and it wasn't happy.  Feeling better, so, here I am.

I won't say who sent me this, but, one of the people who submitted something lost their dad.  If we ever lose sight of why we write, keep this in mind:  We write to make a connection with each other.  We write to touch each other.  This person spent hours watching this show with their dad and he put a copy of the script in his dad's coffin.  

That's why we do this.  That's why we suffer through the hardships, doubts, hard times, etc.  Don't ever forget that.  I know I won't.

Onto the OWC, more like a One Month, am I right??

This exceeded both Don and my wildest dreams.  He was very happy with the interest and the follow-through.  20 of you took something you liked and gave it your spin.  I plan to read a bunch more now that the neck finally just hurts instead of really hurts.  I hope you fix it up and I wish each of you the best of luck with any future contest you enter for it.  The market is huge.

Writer's Choice
3.64 - Branded: "The Lone Ranger" by JEStaats (JEStaats) writing as ? - Series, Action - Wrongfully accused of cowardice and drummed out of the Army, he must prove that he is a man. 14 pages

Writers Liked
3.54 - Elm Street: Pilot by Eric Wall (EWall433) writing as That’s So Craven - Series, Horror - A student journalist works to uncover horrifying secrets in the not-so-sleepy town of Springwood.

3.50 - Quincy G.I.:  "Dancing On Coals" by Cameron Gray (Cam Gray ) writing as ? - Series, Crime, Mystery - In the ruins of post war Germany, a young Quincy tracks a murderer hiding amongst the bloodshed. 20 pages

3.41 - Knight Rider by Rene (ReneC) writing as David Hasselhoff - Series, Action - A special operative and an A.I. powered car full of gadgets and weapons are determined to take down the hostile A.I. responsible for destroying their organization. 24 pages

And the rest
The Knight Rider by John Robbins and Steve Clark (oJOHNNYoNUTSo and Steven Clark) writing as Dynamic Duo - Series, Action - In the California desert, a prototype that was never meant to see the light of day has been awakened. Now Michael Knight, a wealthy teenage loner, must drive the very car that could be responsible for his father's disappearance.

Happy Days by Gary Howell (hawkeye) writing as Someone - Series, Drama - When Richie is involved in an automobile accident, it leads to a series of unfortunate events, including the death of a mystery man. 21 pages

Quantam Leap by Cameron Dueker (CameronD) writing as Ziggy - Series, Adventure - In search of her father, lost in the time stream, an adventurous scientist travels back to the LA Riots of 1992 to save an angry youth from a needless death. 20 pages

12 O'Clock High: Mona Lisa Bombs by Joe Garza (SPQR) writing as General Motors - Series, Action - An elite bomber crew is tasked with a rather unusual mission. 21 pages

Friday The 13th: Crystal Lake Campfire Stories by Zack (Zack) writing as The Invisible Man - Series, Horror - What better place to tell a campfire story than Camp Crystal Lake?

VR Troopers by Dave Farnum (heyDaddyStudios ) writing as Shaggy - Series, Action, Sci Fi - When the consequences of a Virtual Reality game bleed into the real world, a girl and her unlikely group of friends must find a way to set things back to normal.

Becker: Pilot by Khamanna Isdandarva (Khamanna) writing as ? - Series, Comedy - Same old Becker only older and meaner shows his hatred for life and everything around him in a retirement home. 23 pages

Rise of Columbo: Episode 1: Two Personalities Makes One Kill by Alexander (PrussianMosby) writing as I'm Just Like Totally Stoked To Be Here (Created by Richard Levinson
& William Link) - Series, Crime - On his flight to his new L.A. job,  the young Sergeant Columbo already has to solve a murder.

Thundarr The Barbarian by Darren James Seeley (DarrenJamesSeeley) writing as Antonio del Sole (Based on characters created by Steve Gerber, Joe Ruby, and Ken Spears) - Series, Sci Fi, Fantasy,  - In a post apocalypse wasteland ruled with mysticism and recycled technology, three heroes will stand up against the tyranny of a malevolent wizard as they escort two refugees out of the ruins of Manhattan. 24 pages

Miami Vice: A New Darkness by Eric Dixon (Jack) writing as Eric Dixon - Series, Action - Vice detective JJ Baumbach forms a temporary partnership with flashy, silk suit wearing federal agent Lionel Hayes as the two infiltrate the dark underbelly of organized crime in Miami.   24 pages

Space Ghost: "Bury the Ghosts" by Chris Bodily (ChrisBodily) writing as Herculoid Poirot - Series, Action, Drama, Superhero - When Moltar kills his sidekick, a still-grieving Space Ghost must put the past behind him in order to face Zorak. 17 pages

Monsters by Ammar Salmi (realxwriter) writing as Gustav Kottmann - Series, Crime, Thriller - A 30 years old experiment that once took place in East Germany to create perfect soldiers through psychological reprogramming finds a new host on the U.S. soil.

The Lone Ranger: Issue 1: Origin by Dustin Bowcot (DustinBowcot) writing as Who was that masked man? (Based on the original story, The Lone Ranger by Fran Striker) - Series, Sci Fi, Thriller - A Texas Ranger exacts revenge against the criminals that murdered his family.

Dexter's Laboratory: The Laboratory by Waleed Zein (Waleed) writing as Masatotai - Series, Horror - {no logline}

Family Ties: I want one! Me too! by Frank MacCrory (FrankM) writing as Marty McFly - Series, Comedy - Alex tries to take advantage of some environmentalists. Danny is forced to work with his father in law. 15 pages

Gomer Pyle USMC: Gomer Pyle Has Kids by D Scott Mangione (DSM) writing as D Scott Mangione - Series, Comedy - When Gomer Pyle discovers his old girlfriend is pregnant with another man's baby, he must break-up with the Commander's daughter to marry his true love and start a family.
Thanks to all who spent all the time working on it, and reading all the others

You guys were great!!

May each of you sow what you have reaped!!

Let me know if you have any questions.

Dan

Thanks for getting all this together, Dan. I'm really sorry about your situation. I can't even imagine what that must be like. Hang in there, Man. And if you ever need someone to talk to, you got my number.

I'm really happy with my take on a Friday the 13th tv series. Really hated the original series. So I wanted to "fix" it. Thanks to all who read!

And bring on the July OWC!!!!!!!!

Zack

Quoted from DanC Space Ghost - Chris Bodily

Let me be the first to say, congratulations, Khamanna.

Quoted from DanC Dexter's Lab.  I spent 2 hrs looking for this name and have given up.  I am sure one of the other Mods can just update it.

Waleed wrote Dexter. It's actually on the bottom left corner of the title page.

Congrats to everybody who entered, or at least called dibs on a show. It was a fun month-ish.

Thanks, Dan. You did an awesome job, and it was a lot of fun. It was new and fresh, too)


Congrats to the top 5, to HM's and to all who had an entry in. Except Cam didn't write Quincy. He didn't accept the ownership the other day. I'm thinking of adopting it.

Dan!!! I knew something had to have been up, well sorry to hear about all that but really hope to have you back to full health and writing away again. Cheers for running it, really appreciate the effort, especially through the struggle. Also, as per usual, cheers Don!!

John! Congrats mate, really well deserved, still won't forgive you for the black lab though...

Eric, again good script. Lose the classroom scene and that's a grade A effort, worth a tweak or two and use it as a sample piece.

Cheers for the votes for 3rd guys!! I was worried it was a bit too rambly but I'm so happy some of you got a kick out of it, makes it all worth while. And Kham...I neither confirmed or denied it!! So happy you liked it though, you can adopt it, but maybe just on the weekends, and i get it for the rest of the week...

Good work all x

Dan, you're a hero for doing this despite all the challenges you're facing. One day at a time, man, and you've got people who care and have all the patience and understanding you need right here.

Congrats, John! It's a great idea, one I could easily see being picked up.

Eric and Cam, both scripts were great, you deserve to stand on the podium.

This was a really fun challenge. Thanks for putting it together Dan and Don!

Wahoo! First things first: So happy to hear you're feeling better, Dan. Thanks for putting moderating an awesome OMC. I wish you nothing but the best.

Second: Thanks to everyone for your comments and votes. Like I said in my confessional, Branded is going places. I'm going for an hour pilot and have a lot of adventures already in mind for McCord (sans Tonto). Watch for the revision, as it has a nice little twist to the pilot's ending.

Thanks again. It was the best wake-up call I've had in a long time.

~John

Thanks Dan, for running this successful OWC! Great job.

Congrats, John. Branded was a good one. Also to the runner ups. Had fun reading all of these. Looks
Like I’m just gonna have to buy a mug. How much are they, Don? $9.99?

Steve

Sorry I missed this one. Just got back from 30 days of travel (DC, Philadelphia and Maui. It's been a whirlwind. Congrats to the top 4! It looked to be a very difficult challenge.

Quoted from SAC Thanks Dan, for running this successful OWC! Great job. Congrats, John. Branded was a good one. Also to the runner ups. Had fun reading all of these. Looks Like I’m just gonna have to buy a mug. How much are they, Don? $9.99? Steve

$260.99 + shipping - https://www.cafepress.com/simplyscripts.582173060

Not even I own a SS mug...

- Don

JESUS CHRIST!! I like how the mug with black trim is $2.00 extra.

Quoted from Don $260.99 + shipping - https://www.cafepress.com/simplyscripts.582173060 Not even I own a SS mug... - Don

This was hilarious

Are you EFFIN' kidding me!? I'll just stick to drinking coffee directly out of the pot. At least until I win one of those bad boys.

Zack

And that's for the right-handed mug. Lefties need to call and special order.

Quoted from JEStaats And that's for the right-handed mug. Lefties need to call and special order.

It's actually the introverted right-hander's mug, which functions as an extroverted left-hander's mug. (Graphic faces a right-hander, faces away from a left-hander).

At least you can get a 3% rebate using Ebates, so it's only... forget it, it's still car payment.

They're expensive because each one is carefully hand crafted with the tears from a Jeff review.

Quoted from MarkItZero They're expensive because each one is carefully hand crafted with the tears from a Jeff review.

Let's order a whole bunch and see if Alex can find someone to actually manufacture them...

Quoted from MarkItZero They're expensive because each one is carefully hand crafted with the tears from a Jeff review.

And into those Mugs Jeff pored his hatred and his malice. One Mug to rule them all!

Quoted from FrankM It's actually the introverted right-hander's mug, which functions as an extroverted left-hander's mug. (Graphic faces a right-hander, faces away from a left-hander). At least you can get a 3% rebate using Ebates, so it's only... forget it, it's still car payment.

See my pic? One of each.  

Have you ever noticed a glaring grammatical error in your post, but not until after it was quoted?  

Big thanks goes to the man with the plan who helped hold this craziness together, Dannay! Congratulations to the top three, This wasn’t an easy task by any means, but I had a helluva good time participating.

Been busy but congrats to JESstats. Branded was my fav of the scripts I read and I had a feeling it was gonna walk away with this one.

That said, with regards to my Quantum Leap script I am pissed and kicking myself for that dumb little A instead of U left in the title. I swear I google searched the name 3 or 4 times when writing to make sure I had it right and the fact it slipped through on the title page makes me mad. I got crucified for it in the comments, rightfully so, but I felt it was a strong script and had dreams of a repeat with it. Shame.

Guess I'll have to start over from scratch next time an OWC rolls around these parts.

Congratulations to the winners and well done to Dan for organizing such a tremendous OMC (one month challenge). I wish I'd taken part. I see a Quincy script came second, I've not read any of these so far but I'm going to have to read that one at least.

-Mark

In light of Miami Vice being a big, fat loser in the OWC  


I'm now obsessed with completing a Season 1 of my reboot.  My two hour pilot episode comes in at 102 pages and should be posted sometime tonight according to Don.  


Episode II Blowback and Episode III El Chango coming soon!  I'm testing the waters to see if anyone enjoys the stories.    Either case, I'm sure having fun with it.

Quoted from ericdickson In light of Miami Vice being a big, fat loser in the OWC   I'm now obsessed with completing a Season 1 of my reboot.  My two hour pilot episode comes in at 102 pages and should be posted sometime tonight according to Don.   Episode II Blowback and Episode III El Chango coming soon!  I'm testing the waters to see if anyone enjoys the stories.    Either case, I'm sure having fun with it.

Normally I'd caution against writing more episodes since you'll likely have to rewrite them all if the show gets picked up, but if you're doing this for kicks and to entertain people with the scripts, have at it.

Personally, I try to avoid wasting time writing something that doesn't stand a chance of getting picked up. That Knight Rider script will get written because I think the show might actually work, and that Hasselhoff reboot has to make it past the script and pilot phase. After the last failed attempt, I highly doubt it will get greenlit for anything more than the pilot. And when it flops, I'll be there with a fantastic script and my very un-Hasselhoff-like smile.

What if I simply changed the name to "Streetwise" and lost the Miami Vice reboot angle?  Will that stop all the hate?  

I'm personally finding that getting features produced and trolling craigslist has been a waste of my time and life and am turning to writing for the love of it.  I'm enjoying the challenge of coming up with new concepts with a set cast of characters.


I've had five feature films fall through since 2014 including Squad Room, Charlie Charlie with Tom Sizemore, HOA, The Anarchist's Playground and The Night Watchers which was produced but never completed post-production.  

To say I'm disenchanted would be putting it mildly.  Attempting an episodic series is a first for me and it's been a great writing exercise.  
    

Quoted from ericdickson In light of Miami Vice being a big, fat loser in the OWC   I'm now obsessed with completing a Season 1 of my reboot.  My two hour pilot episode comes in at 102 pages and should be posted sometime tonight according to Don.   Episode II Blowback and Episode III El Chango coming soon!  I'm testing the waters to see if anyone enjoys the stories.    Either case, I'm sure having fun with it.

Take the name Miami Vice off it and don't have any connections to the old TV show, the 2005 film, or, if it gets going, the series reboot which is in development. Or you can "wait and see" what that reboot looks like, and retool your work to write a spec for that series, again if it comes to pass.

I like the direction I was going in with my own script, but unless some one wants to do it as a fan film, I don't think I can do much else with it, as I don't have rights to the IP. I could, if I so choose, to take out Thundarr and the supporting characters except for the two or three characters unique to the story (not based off any pre existing characters) and use some stuff for, say, a bunch of "new" characters, or even a "sequel" to my own short Dragons Of Ash. (which almost got made, but I think it got sidetracked and it aint ever happening)

But in my rewrite here, it remains Thundarr.
It was a nice OWC exercise, ,