Well everyone pretty much summed it up. I opened this up, and right when I saw that huge paragraph, I was about ready to skip but then I noticed that it was "rolling credits."

Chuck and guy, take that out. They reveal something we already know.

The adventure to the pumpkin was kind of...dull. And it took forever for the owl to get to the snake and two lizards. I kept reading and it just continued.

This wasn't really funny to me, but I could see where you were trying to be funny. I'm thinking this could be more of an animated children's show if you took out the language.

Last, but not least, and certainly pointed out the most, there wasn't any jack-o-lantern carving anywhere. There was talk, which sort of sticks to the theme, but the theme called for jack-o-lantern carving.,

And yes, I recognized at least Uwesley's name.

Sean

This was...different. Ok with the talking animals, the lizards remind of the Gieco Gecko, a popular advertising character in the US, or possibly even the now classic Frankie and Louie, the Budwieser Lizards from a few years back...

So...What happened to the pumpkins? Why didn't Rumbert and Uwesley get to the bottom of the whole "disappearing pumpkins" dilemma? This is a fantasy story-Could have had a pumpkin eating dragon or giant or something, and the lizards work it out so both sides are happy...

That being said, that huge block of scroll text could have been revealed as Rumbert and Uwesley go on thier adventure to find out what happens...

The core of this story is good- two lizards find out what happened to the pumpkins and saves halloween-, but the execution at this point is off, reading almost like a hurried first draft to try and beat the deadline...

This reads as though there was an idea, perhaps Tierny_Cat's idea about the hybrid pumpkin, which sounds novel and interesting, and then we have a long dialogue from the two lizards.  I think the bellydancing bit was supposed to be funny, but it got lost amid the life and death issue of the snake and the owl.  

I thought there might be something with getting the pumpkin back so the lizards coiuld get the credit, because the other townspeople would give them a fight, I would think, but we jump right to the knighting.  I think this could have fit the parameters if we lost the opening, went to the lizards and had more conflict around the pumpkin.  But I've been known to be wrong before and on many levels.

I'm nearing the end of the scripts and then Wow!  Another little gem.

I really "dig" this one.  It's short and sweet, the animal characters you've got down perfectly.  It's funny...

As far as little problems, I noted these:

>quite mad *lose the [quite]

-might leave out [stopping hitting] It's awkward.

>and no philistine cat with his [bullshit] lose that and similar crudeness because I'm seeing this as made for a wider audience

I love these lines:

>Disguised as what?
>A statue.

And the snake's line: with his hisssss.  Marvelous.

The title needs to be made possessive as in "The Pumpkin's Disappearance."  But I don't know, maybe something a little more memorable, like "A Lizard's Quest: Lord of the Pumpkins."

I really enjoyed the rolling credits.  I saw the star wars beginning.

Super job!

Sandra