Picked this one...because it was the second one down the list I had not read yet.
Lots of typos and such here. I'm suspecting a newbie writer, possibly even a non native English speaking person. If you are a native English speaking person, then...your grammar is crap, sorry to say. No worries though, that's something that can be learned.
You have two different houses where scenes in this story take place. You need to differentiate between them in your slugs so we know which house the scenes take place in. INT. ALA'S HOUSE - DAY and INT. MARY'S - DAY.
You don't need to write MORNING and LATE MORNING in your slugs. Just write DAY or NIGHT and follow with specific times in your action paragraph.
INT. ALA'S HOUSE - DAY
Rays of early morning sun blah blah bla...
Vanilla envelope? Pretty sure that's supposed to be manila.
Lots of things of that nature to fix. Those are easy fixes.
The story itself, does not work as is, IMO, but it's not a bad start. Ala has a fear of people. Nosy neighbors decide to forcefully find out why she's so strange. They enter her house as a group uninvited. Ala can't handle this and dies from a stress related heart attack.
That's an okay start. How you tell it, needs some work.