Love this story, but it’s a little too long to fit in the allotted pages. But an easy fix, I’m sure.

Congrats on completing owc.

I would say revise the execution and make this a bit longer. It happens to the best of us when you are trying to rush.

Unfortunately I wasn’t scared. This is more cute than scary.

Hope this helps,

Gabe

A cute little tale. Not my cup of tea, but I liked the story. I can see it adapted as a Halloween animated short, but the script needs a good edit and some cleanup. Not sure about how it would fit into a three-page comic however. Good job, writer.

Cute little tale, I really liked it.

Very halloweenie. And in the spirit of this PG horror format requirement.
And I liked the imagery here. There's a lot of it - good for the PG comic too.

Maybe substract some repetitive dialog, add some dialog for the texture - add, substract, the usual deal)
Good luck to you with it.

It could be a cute Halloween story for kids, but for the OWC I think it missed the mark. There’s little tension, I didn’t feel like the kids were ever really in danger. The gnomes being a monster was a stretch, and the scarecrow never really came into play. I was most worried about the candy they got from that house, but the longline set something up that never happened. Too many beats slowed down a piece that didn’t have a lot to begin with, and I was often confused about the geography of the locations.

Still, it could work with a hefty rewrite and more focus on the kids vs. garden gnomes, but what are the gnomes after? What is their motivation? That would have helped to know.

Good effort, congrats on getting an entry in.