Love this one.  One of my faves!  

My only suggestion - throw in a few extra lines when the man wakes up in the basement.  Something like this as a bridge:

Margo: So - you like terrorizing old ladies, do you?  We're so fragile. So alone.  I guess I could call the police. But what if they let you out? Someone like me wouldn't stand a chance...  My mind's all I have left these days. So, Mr. Intruder - here's my plan...

But whether incorporated or not, this one's definitely a winner in my book.  Kudos!  

A great last read for me, for the OWC!

Haunting script with an eerie vibe.  5 pages flies by as she pieces together the puzzle and BOOM!  For anyone who hasn't seen a horror movie before, there's your classic jump-scare.

It would translate to a nifty short, no doubt.  The finale though... hm, twist on the legend, but I don't really buy it, like a few others.  It's a good twist, but... oddly, I didn't exactly get the whole "67 year old is a psychopath" vibe from an old woman who likes jigsaw puzzles.

Nice entry.

Good job.

Little bit of a Misery flavour happening here with the CRACK of wood on bone. Capably written, flowed well - obviously written by a U.S. member given the spelling of Ax.

It works well when the 'lights go on' and it is Margot who is standing over him - turning the tables - and this is a pretty nifty line:

Jigsaws are just too easy for me
these days.  What I need is a
challenge.

I suppose I would have liked a bit more lead up, a bit more suspense before that grizzly denouement - some valid reason he gets his comeuppance apart from him loitering outside with an axe  .  

Hmm, I don't know, on screen it would just turn into a gore-fest and some people like that...  

A bit more cat and mouse beforehand, that might do the trick.
Nicely done.

Excellent writing and really cool story. Not sure what else to add. It was really good. Nice job writer!!

Works for me.  Added detail might be her numbering the pieces of him.  And you have to ask why she went to the trouble of keepign him alive.  if she's going to hack him into pieces anyway, why bother?  Still, a solid work.

Best
Richard

Final piece...

This is one of those that has been affected by me reading the urban legend before so I knew most of the first half, however, you did add an extra, so we'll done for that.

I still find it hard that someone lives after the arms legs etc are cut off. In fact I can't buy that. But if you just keep to her cutting open the inards that could work.

At that length we don't go very deep into anything, but it's simple  and effective.

The Final Piece

Dark story. Great opportunity to film sth. in a seemingly "easy" manageable way. Would only need some makeup/costume for the torso image, or an open end with her swinging the ax down for example...

It's a short short (which I prefer), it has character, climax, and it has twist -- solid stuff.

Yep, I really liked it and this gets a big thumbs up from me.

I was wondering where this was going to end up, as I had visions of the old lady being a victim, but I'm so glad it finished the way it did. Nice twist.

Very good indeed.

Little old lady goes bonkers!
Really well written. Tight description, minimal dialogue.
Unexpected twist that keeps with the "puzzle" theme.
Well done.

Loved it!

Not much I can say that hasn't already been said.

Definitely in my top five. Great job.

I really liked this one. Anything I could suggest is little stuff that’s not really that important. But here goes…

You could start off with her just looking at her massive puzzle collection and realizing she’s done them all, rather than have her do two puzzles. That one image really says everything.

Should you foreshadow? Idk. I’d worry that any foreshadow might give away the game, though it’d be amusing to include a shot of her deboning a chicken.

And finally I thought it would be cool at the end to have her basement contain several previous dismembered victims, all reassembled like variations of Frankenstein’s monster.

But those are just random ideas. This works pretty well as is.

Writer,

Very good entry. Concise, no wasted space. Her "gnarled hands" was a great descriptor, aside from her age it really gave me a good sense of how old she was. That's good writing, and good characterization.

The story had a nice twist, and although its a bit of a stretch to think of her wielding a baseball bat like that, no less an axe, it still works methinks.

Very good effort here, although I'm not familiar with this UL.

Steve

Very detailed, gruesome and all round excellent read.

I just recently watched the Babadook based on a children's book and this reminded of that.
It would be a great little short movie.

Well done, one of my favs for sure and I have a feeling I know who wrote this.

Last read of the bunch. I'm hoping I saved one of the best for last...let's see what we have...

Well...can't say I'm impressed out of the gate, sorry to say.  Page 1 shouldn't be numbered and using "THE" in your opening Slug is a bit odd, but then again, it gives an almost fairytale quality to "this Old House...as if it's the only one.

Opening sentence is awkwardly phrased.  Using "domicile" here won't win you any points, either.

Writing is getting better.  Nice and basic with nothing over the top to disrupt the read.

A few too many uses of "then" for my tastes, but nothing major.

I could definitely do without the aside on page 2, but at least it's not obnoxiously worded.

The end.

Short and sweet with few hiccups along the way.  Easy to read, easy to follow.  I'm not familair with this UL, so I'm hoping it actually is one.

The other writers should pay attention to this one, as it's a good example of how effective writing looks and is handled.  No wasted lines, no wasted space.  Strong visuals with few adjectives.  And even though it may appear to be quite dense, understand there's almost no dialogue, which makes everything that much harder.

This is a good one to end the OWC on.  I like leaving positive reviews, but don't get many opportunities.

Good job here.  This is 1 of 3 scripts that I gave a 4.0 or higher, out of 5.  This comes in tied for 2nd place, in my book.

This one was a strange blend of horror and comedy for me.

And both came at the end - its horrific ending came out of nowhere and for some reason it read very funny.
I loved the woman at the end but the ending doesn't work for me nonetheless as it's a strange blend.
It's also not paced very well in my opinion. It moves slowly at the end and then the woman is suddenly a monster. A funny monster though.

Written very well for a week. And for 5 weeks too - I wish I could write like that. And I could appreciate little dialog.

Anyway, very entertaining, but somehow off.