I don't get how "everyone" knew he was dead?

Didn't she only tell the landlord that he was on that ship to get out of paying the rent?

I also think that the landlord accepted her excuse too easily after 12 months of nonpayment of rent. Seems like he would have an eviction notice in his hand.

I didn't find it very funny, just silly. I did smile at the end when she went after him with a bat though.

Congrats on finishing the OWC

Cindy

Read it.

Some spelling and grammar errors (some may have been on purpose maybe) lol

The story is kinda enjoyable, could look okay on film I suppose. To bad Red is gone, he would be great in the role.

Good job on getting it done.

As I go:

Page 4:  I have almost had enough of "Tyler Perry's Dead n' Gone".  Sitcoms are repulsive, leave 'em for their equally repulsive medium.
Long time getting to the premise; it could be summed up pretty quickly that she lied to avoid paying rent.

Thoughts:

Gah.  Sitcoms.  Not my cuppa tea.  Stereotypes.  Also not my cuppa tea.  Y'know it's the darndest thing, but none of my black family members talk like that.  

Thanks for the read.

Sorry, didn't like this one. The writing made it really tough to read, and all the dialogue at the beginning felt like nothing but exposition.

Good effort, tho

I got the sitcom vibe with this one as well. Would probably have to have a laughter track though for people like me, it just wasn't my cup of tea. Not so bad that I hated it or anything, just the humour wasn't my type of humour. Different people like different things and all that.

Another one where I'd like to see the numbers written in dialogue, but again that may just be me.

Also while reading the dialogue for Alisa I thought she sounded Jamaican. Was just wondering if that was how it was meant to sound?

Ultimately it kind of just passed me by.

Arty.