I liked it I thought some of the dialogue had a bit too muh telling, but overall you did a good job in painting a clear visual image.

Good job

I want to mention something that might be very important because if I ignore it for too long, I'll likely forget it as I get
washed in the tides of the moments.

The comment is regarding the title:
Sweet Justice

I must admit that I re-searched your title far too many times. I kept losing the
story vs. the title. What happened is that I felt like I had a severe memory disorder, (which I probably do anyways) but this script title exacerbated the problem.So...

Sweet Justice sounds very serious to me and it doesn't suit the flavor of this work.

I remember now "Limpwrist Lary" and other namesakes that might be appropriate, but yes...

You need to change the title to reflect the comedic tone.

There are certain scripts that remain true to themselves and reach down deep to their title. Many in this batch did just that. An example off the top:


Exposed.


But like I said, there were many good title choices. As I said,

Sweet Justice is one script that really needs a name change.

If a person can't identify the script with its name, then we have an issue.

Your script is solid, but we need to figure out a better name.

Sandra

Thanks for all the reads and comments.  To be perfectly honest, this one was a pisser but I'm glad most people found it light and somewhat humorous.  I had a feeling a lot of the scripts would be pretty heavy material, so I threw this one in the mix to lighten things up.  I definitely could have thrown some more twists in there, but I had that deadline looming.

Good owc.  Look forward to October.

Okay read it.

Well writen as far as I can see.

Story was a typical gunslinger one, but with a gay twist. It made for some comedic moments. Its original I'll give it that, I havent seen to many gay westerns of late lol.

Good job on getting it done.

I thought this was funny.  I enjoyed it for what it was, and of course, I had to read it because of the logline.