Dunder-Mifflin: The Smartest Guys in the Room by Chris Frazier - Series, Sitcom - When Jan instructs Michael Scott to develop the “Office IQ” by increasing employee knowledge on standard practices and procedures, Michael misinterprets the assignment and administers an intelligence test to the Scranton branch. Once the results are in, the office learns that Oscar ranks just under genius level, a finding that provokes Michael to challenge Oscar to an old fashioned game of Jeopardy. Also, Dwight tries out the mustached look. 25 pages - html, format

Excellent.  Just excellent.  If I didn't know any better, I would think that this is an actual script for the series.  You have managed to capture all of the characters very well, and the sub-plot of Dwight with a moustache was brilliant.  I highly suggest you send this in to NBC just to see what happens.  Great work.

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Fantastic. If you don't already have an agent, this should do the trick. Great A and B. Pitch perfect tone. Just the right touch of heart. Have you registered this with the WGA? If not, do so today. This is the sort of script that will get you noticed. I'm very envious. Please write another. It makes me work harder.

Don't, however, send it to NBC. They can't and won't read it and you don't need that sort of discouragement. In the hands of a good agent, this is the sort of spec script that could land you a freelance gig on a similar show like Earl. If you really want to write for The Office, perform this same sort of miracle with an Earl spec. Again, BRAVO!

This was excellent for a fan script! I found reading this script just as enjoyable as watching the show. You kept everyone in character, and the dialogue was realistic (well, for the show, anyway). Great job! I'm looking forward to your next script.

I don't even watch the show, but was none the less entertained by your script (which is not easy to do, trust me).  Keep up the good work.

Sorry for the lateness of this review, but I was just snooping through the boards and happened to stumble across this little script. The Office is my favourite show on TV at the moment. And a lot has changed on the show since you wrote this script, obviously, but I still enjoyed it quite a bit.

The characters were spot on, the story was good and there were plenty of laughs. It's just like an episode of the show. Dwight with the moustache was genius. It would be fantastic if the producers actually did an episode with that as a sub-plot. I'm not usually a big reader of fan fiction, but I gave your script a try and I'm glad that I did. A very enjoyable read. Again, sorry for the lateness of this review.


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This... was... brilliant... everything about it oozed "Office" excellence... You captured every character beautifully. I could visualize every scene in my head. It was almost like I was watching an episode. You're Michael, inparticular, was spot on. I also felt like you gave Pam a dreamy, sort of tragic innocence that I haven't really noticed in Fischer (I still love her though). And my God, the jokes were hilarious! I laughed out loud a number of times (which was a bad thing I read this in class!). I wish I had some criticism, maybe something to tweek, but I don't. It was excellent. Better than some of the weaker episodes (thought they rarely happen). I have to repeat what others said... get an agent and start freelancing now! Maybe you already have. You're a terrific writer! You deserve to be paid for your gift.

To conclude: "You dego guinny bastard. I was giving it to your mother last night."

Keep up the excellent work.

There have been some good Office scripts posted here, but this one is clearly the best.

"You better get a pregnancy test, 'cause I think I'm the daddy."  Awesome.

I'd like to know what happened to this guy, Chris Frazier.

that was really good.  however, based on all the other comments i was expecting a laugh out riot.  

and i don't get the term fan fiction...  isn't any sitcom or hour tv spec fan fiction?you wouldn't be able to write it without watching dozens of episodes first.  this is a viable piece that if included with other spotless scripts, can make a valuable portfolio to get an agent or freelance.

Well, the whole point is that a hit TV show already has a group of writers assignment to writing each episode.  Someone righting fan fiction is pretty much worthless, because there is no possible way that it would get made since it is out of studio.

Also, agents are wanting to see marketable in your portfolio.  While it can show that you can write, if also is pointless to an agent.  Signing someone with a portfolio full of fan fiction is pretty much signing someone with no works to represent.

By the way, great job on the script.  It captured the characters exactly as they appear on the show.

That is not true.  A portfolio should have at least two spec scripts from different formats of comedy (if you want to write sitcoms) and one pilot that you thought up on your own.  This is to show you can capture someone else's format and ideas and characters & expand on their ideas.  The Pilot is to show that you have your own brain and can use it too.  You need to prove both to get a staff job.  Also, you cannot expect to get on the office by writing an office spec...  but you can get on a similar formatted show like Earl or one of the many new single-camera sitcoms coming out this fall.

I cannot speak for what an agent is looking for, however, I figure they'd ask for the same thing in a portfolio if they represent TV sitcom writers.  How else can they market you into a staff job to make them money?

I think the movie writers are passing judgement that TV specs are not viable samples... but maybe it is just me.

No, you're right - you need to demonstrate that, if placed on the staff for an existing show, you could write for them no problem - as well as showing off your own ideas and style in a piece of original work.

And avoid using the word 'fan fiction.' that's a borderline insult to those of us who put such time into professionally-crafted screenplays for current TV shows - we're honing our craft with a view to getting an agent and a paid writing gig, not writing about the further adventures of Harry Potter for the benefit of ourselves and seven guys on the internet ^_^

but hey - this is just me, a bitter guy who's tried twice now to submit a Wikipedia article on 'virtual series' - i.e script-format original work presented as a season of an actual TV show - only for the Wiki boys to just stick a forwarding arrow to the 'fan fiction' article on it. which makes me sad.

Excellent. That's all I can say. Just excellent.