Cool.
I've read the first six pages and here's some advice. The dialogue should be towards the middle of the page. You should try not to use camera directions - like all the cut to's are unneccesary.
Interesting but you should read any other screenplay for series. It will help you format it properly.
It was kinda random when NOMURAS used his power to help somebody he has never met to do a spell his has never heard off. Which then leads to the start of the end of the world. Can't off that been done better - anyway that's just opinion. |