Hi Ghostwriter,

Happy that you think the characters were well written, especially Mary.

I'm also very glad to hear you got a few laughs out of it- that's great news.

I've written 6 episodes altogether, by expanding it do you mean reworking it into a feature? I've also had a suggestion to see if I can get a local amatuer dramatics company interested in it.

Thanks for reading and your comments, it's greatly appreciated.

Craig

Hey Craig

The banter between Mary and Edith is funny.  I love how you slowly drip a bit more info about there lives, like Mary lives with her mum and there was I thinking she was stuck with her in her own house lol.  This makes even more funny that she's always shouting at her about the state of the house.

Oh no, is this going where I think it's going.....yes, yes it is.  Has Roy just buffed Mary's daughter lol.

Well this was a bit different from previous episodes, a bit more about the characters and a bit less of the one liners.  I think it worked well, it was a change not to have a scene where Mary verbally abuses her audience lol.

I enjoyed this Craig...as I have all the previous episodes.  Is there only one left or are you planning a bigger series?  I honestly think these could get made, have you heard anything from the writers room?

anyway keep up the good work.

Cheers Alffy,

I'm glad you are continuing to enjoy the series. I was a bit worried about this one initially because of the lack of the readings, but I think it worked okay, and I'm glad you agree.

Yes, there's only one episode left to come!

I had a letter back from the writers room saying that it 'wasn't for them' !

Cheers for the feedback buddy,

Craig

Another good episode. Different, but it still works all the same. I wasn't worried about the lack of readings at all. Mary and Edith drinking the "Satan’s balloon knot" had me smiling. The dialogue between both was good, especially Mary moaning about the state of the house.

I was happy to see Iona and Sam get some more pages. The ending with Roy was also well disguised as the stud. The next episode should be something special. Great work.

Oh, and screw the Writer's Room. They waste our License fees to produce sh*tty programs year in, year out. They have proven they don't know a good thing when they see it.  

Brian

Hi Brian,

It was a bit different from the others, and it's good to see someone else agree that it works- thanks!

I'm very happy with the next episode- it still needs a bit of work, so won't be on here just yet. I hope you think it's special enough when it arrives on here. I've tried to make the series go out with a bang.

Thanks for your feedback and encouragement- greatly appreciated buddy.

Craig

Quoted from craig cooper-flintstone I had a letter back from the writers room saying that it 'wasn't for them' !

Mate, that's a shame.  I love this series and thought it would look great filmed.  There are some shows on TV that are just not funny, 'My Family' being one, how many series have they flogged that dead horse for now?

Alffy,

I know what you're saying- I agree, there is a lot of pap on telly these days.

Well you know I'm a fan from way back dontcha? Have just recently read eps 4 & 5 'Comma' Cooper-Flintstone (sorry, couldn't resist)and the development of the series just gets better and better. Added bonus to the comedy and your spot-on dialogue is that nice touching moment between Iona & Sam in Ep 5. and Iona's roll in the hay with the 'stud'.

Anyway at risk of riding on RE's coat-tails I got to thinking along the same lines of bringing back some of Mary's previous 'victims' and how that could be best realised. The truth hurts and some may be out for revenge or at least want to 'expose' some of Mary's antics, and/or hold them up to some further examination.

So, with that thought in mind I think there's an excellent opportunity given Mary's prev. 'published work' (which she always doles out at the 'meetings') to expand upon that idea. Perhaps a 'publisher' offers Mary an opportunity for a 'book tour'. Imagine: Mary and Edith travel to the 'big smoke' - an interview on a talk show could be fun - and perhaps some unexpected guest roles (i.e. those who have previously been affected by Mary's very exacting revelations). Interviewed of course by some snooty BBC type too. Writer's room - you paying attention?! Lots of opps. there I think. And/or Mary on some panel/forum show up against organised-religious types. Just some thoughts. You get the gist.

I'll finish by echoing 1987brian and Allfy's sentiments that the Writers Room obv. don't know talent and 'originality' when they see it. They've got it wrong before - we know that! Let's just hope they're a little slow on the uptake, or that a better offer will come your way. Would be great to see this filmed. Good luck mate.

Hi Libby,

That is a great suggestion regarding previous victims showing their faces again, and the tour/chat show scenario would be brilliant. Maybe even a radio call-in show?

They're great suggestions, and I'll seriously consider them should I feel the urge to start on series two.

Thanks for your kind words and encouragement, I'm really happy that you enjoyed the series. I would never have even written it if you hadn't read 'Heavenly Intentions' and suggested that I try making a comedy version of it. For that I thank you greatly.

Hope you enjoy the finale when it appears on here.

All the best,

Craig

Just finished reading the 4 sections of Spiritual Connections.
Section 1 was very entertaining, all of the characters held my attention.

The medium being presented as genuinely gifted was a nice surprise, and the audience reactions to each revelation were, to my ear, precise and perfectly timed.

The humor seemed good natured and fast moving and there seemed to be a story line worth following.

The sections that followed were also entertaining, but the characters became somewhat less likable -- I mean the characters seemed to be shown predictably to their worst advantage -- so that the humor seemed more forced and eventually became tiresome.

I think your writing style is excellent, every description is exact, the dialogue sounds convincing.  The humor is well paced so there are no dull sections.

Your writing far out-classes your subject matter, although with the right actors and actresses this could be a successful production - maybe it already is.

anyway, best wishes,
CMH

Quoted from c m hall Just finished reading the 4 sections of Spiritual Connections. Section 1 was very entertaining, all of the characters held my attention.

Thanks for the read, CMH. Glad you were entertained.

Quoted from c m hall The medium being presented as genuinely gifted was a nice surprise, and the audience reactions to each revelation were, to my ear, precise and perfectly timed.

Again, thank you. I was originally toying with Mary being a fake, but I thought it would work better if she spoke the undiluted truth!

Quoted from c m hall The humor seemed good natured and fast moving and there seemed to be a story line worth following.

Quoted from c m hall The sections that followed were also entertaining, but the characters became somewhat less likable -- I mean the characters seemed to be shown predictably to their worst advantage -- so that the humor seemed more forced and eventually became tiresome.

That's not what I wanted! I thought the repetion of the medium's readings may become a tad predictable after a while, that's why in the later episodes I tried to focus more on the characters.

Quoted from c m hall I think your writing style is excellent, every description is exact, the dialogue sounds convincing.  The humor is well paced so there are no dull sections. Your writing far out-classes your subject matter, although with the right actors and actresses this could be a successful production - maybe it already is.

That's good to hear, I'm really pleased you think this way.

Thanks for reading the series, and your feedback is greatly appreciated.

All the best,

Craig

Hey Craig,

Read your script of epsiode 1 and liked it very much.
I'd be interested in discussing production possibilities.
Please contact me at simoseku@hotmail.com

Thanks much,
Simon

Hey Simon,

Thanks for getting in contact again.

I've Emailed you, and am extremely interested to hear your plans.

Speak soon,


Craig

I like The Departure Lounge very much, I wish it had been a little longer.  The dialogue works very well, the characters become real very quickly by their interaction.
The plot twist also works well, I think, there's enough torque built up by the bits of worry in the men's conversation, the "looking back, looking forward" energy builds up.
I don't even think Barry's "well, it (life) was" is needed, he seems to be happy where he is and the sort of instant translation that might go on in his head with the word "life" might be shrugged off, he might say "no complaints", or something.
I wonder if Keith ought to make some brief, even casual mention of having a loving family, or something to suggest he's aware that someone will miss him -- or perhaps be surprised, himself, to come to that realization, as he talks to Barry.  Like I said, I wished this had been longer, but that's exactly the conclusion the audience should and will come to.

Anyway, you've done a lot with just a few pages!

Sorry if I've posted this in the wrong spot -- I'd try to cut and paste but I always make a mess with the tape and scissors.

Hi CMH,

No worries, I'll answer it in the Departure Lounge thread.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's a bit of a 'departure' from Spiritual Connections, no? (excuse the pun).

All the best,

Craig