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Don
Posted: February 9th, 2014, 1:01pm Report to Moderator
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The Fur-Adventures of Koki and Friends by Mauricio Ferreira - Series, Animated - Nine toddlers leaded by Koki the bear, live amazing adventures by making their wishes come true with the help of a magical artifact they found in an ancient tree near their playground. 23 pages - pdf, format


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Posted: February 10th, 2014, 3:14am Report to Moderator
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You need to sort your logline out... it should read: Nine toddlers, led by Koki the bear, live amazing adventures...

Unless they actually have been leaded... maybe Koki the bear got pissed off with them being so organic. Even if that is the case then there should still be a comma after 'toddlers'.

Not my type of script, but it doesn't look good if there are mistakes in your logline.
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