I'm reading your script and I think it's pretty interesting. I think the dialogue is great. Very well-written. I am curious about one thing, though. At a couple of points, you have (IMAGERY) followed by what we're seeing in the scene. What is the purpose of that? If you're showing us, what's in the scene, it might be better to just write it out. Other than that, I think the way you describe characters and the world is pretty cool. I'm curious to see where this goes.
P.S. I'm looking for some feedback on my script. It's Sci-fi, takes place in the near future, and is influenced by The Terminator. It's called Inescapable. I'd appreciate any feedback on it. Thanks.