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Don
Posted: August 28th, 2022, 11:09am Report to Moderator
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Ape Island: Learning the Dopes by Why Botherson (Neon2500) - Series, Comedy, Animated, Sitcom, Family, Buddies, Cartoon -  An anthropomorphic chimp seeks out a job at a convenience store. 6 pages - pdf format

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Hi Neon

Welcome to the boards.

Most people will not finish reading this as it is not formatted correctly and there doesn't appear to be any action/description in it, just dialogue. This tells me you've never read a script, you should start there.

You might also want to make sure you put your best foot forward, reread, revise, and rewrite. One of your characters is currently called Placeholder.



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Hi Neon,

Absurdist, imaginative and whacky stuff here, but for us to get a clear visual picture this needs to be set out according to Industry Standard.

First off you need screenwriting software so that your script is properly formatted (as Matthew said).
Here are some freebies:

https://www.scriptreaderpro.com/free-screenwriting-software/

You need character descriptions, ages, clear demarcation of scene changes, scene headings, character dialogue & character names clearly identifiable.

It's easily fixable with the right software.
Read a few scripts here, rewrite, and repost.

P.S. Here's an episode of The Family Guy for you to read, and note the formatting:

https://www.simplyscripts.com/scripts/familyguy2.html

https://sites.google.com/site/tvwriting/us-animation/family-guy

https://screencraft.org/blog/the-screenwriters-guide-to-formatting-television-scripts/

Btw, note Cold Open or Teaser. Same thing.

Also note the difference in formatting a film script and a TV (series) script. A bit different.
Do your research. You'll get it!



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