Quoted from Helio By the way, is normal 199 pages on your "What is normal". What is normal pages number? Are 120 maximum, aren't ?

Is there a question in here somewhere? lol. I think you're asking if "What Is 'Normal'?" is really 199 pages even though it "should" be 90-120 pages. Well, if that is indeed the question, then yes it is 199 pages. I know it "should" only be 90-120 by traditional standards, but I'm non-conventional when it comes to writing. I can't just write with limits. I just go until the story is told adequately enough to where I am complacent with it.

Sorry Helio, but this one rubbed me the wrong way.

If Mike dies in the factory, how was he at the police station with the detective? That didn't make sense. Anyways, there were way to many grammer problems, but your not american, so I won't hold that against you. also, your dialoge was a bit edgy sometimes. I will say that I did enjoy the atmosphere, it was very moody. Mike was a funny character, as was Felix. I think with a rewrite, this could be pretty good. But overall, not a bad try. 6 out of 10

Hey Zack, thanks a lot for your reading, man!

I wouln't be surprised if this short script gets produced soon, dude!

I think with a rewrite it'd definetly be worth producing! It's a very neat idea.

Now, with the word Mr. Gregory!

"Now, with the word Mr. Gregory!"- Helio

Huh, what do you mean?

Ask him, dude!

About this short script I have to say it was one of my hard exercise writing a nonsense story...well I think did my best. Great characters (nuts, of course, but characters); I told about drogs's alucination, friendship, Walt Disney...well the last one was more dificult to told about. Anyway, this story could be a good example how we all face frustations; anger; prejudice and other things that Sig told us that we keep on the other file we have inside our brain!