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Some of you MoviePoet folks will recognize this as A Date with Jessica. A director out of Toronto found the script and asked if I could make some changes. This reflects those changes. That's why I didn't mention the ages, since he had two actors in mind.
Both characters are in their early 20s.
I know the formatting doesn't adhere to the usual guidelines. I've done that on purpose. I think I've really found my voice with this script.
Thanks, Pia! I keep on meaning to upload a new photo, but eh... it can wait. One of the scenes is shortened a tad bit. I can't remember which off the top of my head. I can email you the second draft, if you're interested.
Thanks for reading, Pants. What made you think it was predictable?
Congrats on the turning this into film. I liked the idea especially the ending. And the dialgoue seemed fine. However, this could be shortened as Pia suggests. Also, I didn't see much conflict on Jerry to not go (only a small portion when Jessica asks and that's it). He seemed more enthusiastic to go. I think by cutting down most of the dialgoue, you can add more description to add towards Jerry's refusal to go. In the end, I liked the story. It just needs a bit of tweaking.
Hope this helps, Gabe
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Thanks, Pia! I keep on meaning to upload a new photo, but eh... it can wait. One of the scenes is shortened a tad bit. I can't remember which off the top of my head. I can email you the second draft, if you're interested.
Thanks for reading, Pants. What made you think it was predictable?
Well as soon as Jessica was in the bed in her wedding dress, I knew she was a figment of his imagination. You did a very good job describing the room and I think that is where I got the idea of her being dead. His living arrangements just sounded depressing.
Though I know what its like posting first and second drafts, as I did with "The Bench," which I just sent in the third and final draft for reading, should be up next week. I will just say I did rather enjoy reading this. I thought some of the dialgoue wasn't needed but was well written. I would love to see the final film version of this. If you don't mind, is there anyway I could read other drafts of this?
Good news! My script was filmed as part of the DVX TimeFest Competition by Robbie Comeau. The winners aren't announced, but I don't care about that. My script was filmed! Can you freakin' believe it?
Hey ABSteel, congrats with the filming of this. I guess I missed this when it was posted. Anywho thought I'd give it a read. I have to confess that I saw the ending coming, then lost it when they talked about the wedding, nice distraction lol. I thought this was a nice little story but liked mention by Pia, it's a little long but I notice the film is a bit different. Just wondering whether you changed this or was it a joint decision? I thought the fil was great by the way and good luck with it.
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A lot of things happened during our conversations. The biggest being, his actor couldn't drive. He liked the original script (the one posted at MoviePoet. I never posted it here.) a lot and the rewrite, so he merged them together.
That came out quite well. I read the short a while back and this seems to true to the material. Nice job all around.
For those of you without high speed connections, this is a pretty big file (35mb) due to the quality.
As for asking Don to "do what he does", do you mean embed the film on the board? If so, it can't be done since it's a straight Quicktime file without a code. The link could probably be put up on the main page though, where everyone is free to bitch about the number of videos on there.