Quoted from ABennettWriter Oh... Would this site have a code?

Yep.  Format codes have been down for awhile.  It's being worked on.  What's really weird is that when I tried to copy the code over from the link you provided, it wanted to put up the kid's fitness video.  I figured it out though.

Yeah... I realized that after I posted, but I'm glad you figured it out.

Thanks for posting it!

Hey Austin,

Very nice looking film.  The director has a wonderful visual sense.  I don't remember reading this script though the story seemed vaguely familiar.  Because of that I expected the ending.  If there was one thing I would suggest is that the ending could be a bit more surprising. Well done though.

I'll say it here as well... this is something to be proud of. Very cool.

Very cool indeed. Best of wishes on everything to come.

Thanks so much.

You too, BryMo.

ABS,

I haven't watched the video yet, but I felt just a tiny bit...cheated. The logline said he was getting ready for his wedding but couldn't talk himself going but then we find out that he's going to his wife's funeral instead.

Then again, it was depressing but a nice little twist at the end. It was a bit long, and it could have been less.

I don't think I added anything new, though, but here's my opinion, sir.

Sean

The original script is nothing like the final product. The director had some ideas that I incorporated into the script.

Saw this on the front page today, and watched the movie before reading your script.

I found the ending to be predictable when I watched it, mostly due to the overacting.  I really think your script as written was much better.  Though if the acting had been better, the revision might have been ok too.  It's hard to tell.

I saw the video before reading the script and was surprised by how different the two are.  It was almost like two different pieces.

I didn't think it dragged and I was surprised by the twist/twists.  Everything flowed nicely and seemed pretty natural.  Good work.


Phil

Hey Austin; Good deal. You guys did a good a job on this...Nice lookin girl, too.  Dragged a little bit as they were walking along, but I think the pacing played into the tension of the story...

Being completely frank, your script is substantially better than the actual movie turned out.  "What a fucking rollercoaster of emotions!"  I hate to jeer, but that's pretty ridiculous.  I hope you weren't responsible for that line.  Should they have filmed the thing exactly how your script plays out, they'd have a more interesting -- and ultimately watchable -- film.

Anyway, congratulations.  You're produced!  Hope it's the first of many to come.

I watched this movie for the first time in probably a year and I still hated it. Now that I've moved and I've managed to save up a few dollars, I'm thinking of filming this myself. With my script.

Luckily i've got a few friends that can help.

No offense, Robbie.

Austin

I just read the script before viewing the film. I see what Pia means about the build up being a bit lengthy but the twist at the end was excellent, unlike the perceptive Pants I never saw it coming, it really caught me on the blind side.

Your style of formatting is interesting and its good you've "found your voice" with it, but I think it does add some unnecessay length to your script, the multiple upper cased headings in particular. However you painted a very vivid picture of the surroundings and as the reader I new exactly what kind of world these people (or person) inhabited.

But hey, it doesn't matter much now anyway since you got it made, well done. Like most cases when I read short scripts on here I tend to prefer the reading experience rather than the visual one. Regardless of Pia's observation I think your setup on page in the room was more effective, the twist was a lot more obvious in the way the film was structured.

The film was nicely done all the same though, could probably do in dropping the music for the most part and the rollercoaster line really has no place in any script in my opinion.

Good job and congrats on getting this one made.

Col.

Quoted from ABennettWriter I watched this movie for the first time in probably a year and I still hated it.

I think the original script is better than the film. IMO the film was boring.