Hey Austin,

this script is a few years old now and I've seen a great improvement from this to your latest one.

I don't know how valid my thoughts on this are now, but...

It has a nice sentimental feel to it which I like, but then its a bit of a sad ending which made me question why was Jerry not sad. I don't know if she was a ghost, or a haunting memory (I don't need to know which) But that fact is she is dead and this is her funeral that Jerry is going to, he didn't seem at all that upset about it.  I can get if Jerry gets caught up in a fantasy of being with his love again, but when she vanishes or fantasy(which ever) comes back to reality. I would think Jerry would be devastated. The setup didn't fit the payoff (or twist). Therefor making it seem long and lengthy and the character a little unbelievable. I'm mean, did Jessica come back from the grave just to make sure Jerry wasn't going to be late to her funeral?... (If so, It could have been a neat little dark comedy if written differently) but I don't think that's what you were going for.
The dialogue also seemed a little too on the surface, could have had more subtext to it, more setup for the reveal at the end.

That being said, this is just my thoughts on it, for whatever that's worth.

Best,
Kev

Where can I watch the film? It was an interesting read though.

Nevermind. I see it. I had to switch to Chrome because Adobe doesn't work on Internet Explorer anymore.