Malcolm,

Thanks for the read, I am glad you enjoyed it.

Ray,

Thank you for the continued input. My other writings are in my signature if you ever wanted to check them out. If you have any other readings, I'd be glad to give them a read as well.

Rob

Hi Tailbest.

What you have done with this script is a favourite of mine, but hard to pull off right. I am referring to having two things that contradict each other. It made me smile reading how Carlton's routine life plays out against the back drop of "End Of The World" hysteria. The two felt so seperate that they don't even impact on each other. Two seperate entities.

What I got out of your script was that Carlton was so deeply stuck in his rut of a life, that he sleepwalks his way through impending doom. and the irony is he complains about how he never gets a good nights sleep.

neat idea, nice read.
      

Tonka,

I appreciate you taking the time to read this short. I am glad I was able to provide something you enjoyed and was able to do something that was a favorite of yours.

Rob

Hey Rob,

Well, being that this is the first time I actually read this as a story, I'll say that I enjoyed it overall. Your main character, while plain, is a very nice contrast to the chaos that surrounds him and that's cool to see. I do agree with some of the others who say that the opening part in the house takes a little longer than it should. If you could cut a third or half a page out of there, it'd probably work a tad better.

And, while the actual writing is dry, it's the way I like it, myself. I don't want to be all bogged down in description. If I wanted you to spend 9 pages describing the texture of a vase, I'll read a Stephen King book. It's simple, basic and it makes for a fast read. Good job.

Sean,

I appreciate the read. You know my writing style cannot reach the pinnacle of description that is Stephen King. In terms of trying to tighten things up, the beginning part seems to be where I struggle the most. Something I'm trying to fix.

Thanks again for checking it out.

Rob