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skp1987
Posted: October 12th, 2011, 2:09pm Report to Moderator
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I really enjoyed this. Hope it gets filmed.
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Don
Posted: April 22nd, 2012, 7:32am Report to Moderator
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Quoted from skp1987
I really enjoyed this. Hope it gets filmed.


It did get filmed.



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I really hate that I don't get any email updates when people are discussing my script on a message board. Guess it's my own fault for not checking... but if I known I had two pages of comments, I woulda commented! Sheesh.

So, yeah, it got made by the awesome guys at FUGO Studios. The opening car crash scene was added when the director requested an opening with more "pop." He was right. The scene turned out great.

Everything else was pretty much as written, with the exception of the girl disappearing in the final shot. Not sure about that one. Sure, it lends a mysterious air to the whole thing, but it implies she may be a ghost as well. She's not. Or maybe the director thought she was. Either way, it's a different choice, and shows what can happen when different people interpret the same story.


Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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This was originally conceived as a full length screenplay. I was having trouble connecting the beginning to the end, so I just left out the 100 or so pages in the middle and smooshed them together. The poster who mentioned there was something missing was spot on. There's a LOT missing, but I did the best I could to make it one small contained story.

This was my first short script attempt, and I think it shows.


Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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I really hate that I don't get any email updates when people are discussing my script on a message board.


If you click the "notify" button at the top of the thread, you will be notified when someone posts something to your thread.  You have to opt in since my personal belief is to limit the number of unwanted emails to a user's inbox.

Don


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angelus77
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Thanks! Man, I keep struggling with this and missing out on discussions of MY material.


Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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Epic - makes me green with envy! Very well done.


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Very well done! The car crash was a nice jump. Definitely looks better on Red, but I can't believe a phone recorded that well.

Good job, for a first short, one hell of a fine production...

James


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Great job angelus77!!!

Getting your first script shot, is pretty darn impressive.

When they talk about the iphone camera, are they actually talking about the i4 phone?

I juus got one on Thursday and love some of the features but havent played with the camera.

I cannot believe that second video was done on a phone camera. WOW!!

Anyway, GONGRATS!!!

Shawn.....><
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Hey Ross,

Congrats on getting this filmed, a very fine production indeed.

Also just read the script and it’s a solid piece and I can understand why it got produced.  I think it was a good idea to add that car crash in at the beginning, definitely gave it some “pop “as you called it.

Good on you.

Steve
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Quoted from Ledbetter
Great job angelus77!!!

Getting your first script shot, is pretty darn impressive.

When they talk about the iphone camera, are they actually talking about the i4 phone?

I juus got one on Thursday and love some of the features but havent played with the camera.

I cannot believe that second video was done on a phone camera. WOW!!

Anyway, GONGRATS!!!

Shawn.....><


Not my first script. I've had a number of options, write-for-hires, and even a trailer made for one of my full-length scripts. However, this is the first script, short or full-length, to actually be filmed start to finish. I'm thankful to the guys at FUGO... it turned out much better than I had hoped.

Nothing definitive, but I hope they enter it in the festival circuit. They've had stuff premiere at Cannes before.

-Duncan



Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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Quoted from CoopBazinga
Hey Ross,

Congrats on getting this filmed, a very fine production indeed.

Also just read the script and it’s a solid piece and I can understand why it got produced.  I think it was a good idea to add that car crash in at the beginning, definitely gave it some “pop “as you called it.

Good on you.

Steve


I never even thought about adding a car crash because I thought it would be too cost prohibitive and I was trying to keep it as low budget as possible (why the other scenes are quiet, one locale kind of scenes). But Eric convinced me they could do it, and not to worry about it, so I wrote the scene for him. Glad I did.



Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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Ledbetter
Posted: April 22nd, 2012, 8:10pm Report to Moderator
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Duncan,

Welcome to Simply Scripts. It seems although you might be new here, you definitely have some skin in the game so far as writing goes.

Look forward to seeing more of your work.

Take care man.

Shawn.....><
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Congrats on getting your short filmed.... Yes, the car scene gave it an extra edge, compared to your submitted script.

Overall a nice read and a good production.

Mark


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Quoted from Ledbetter
Duncan,

Welcome to Simply Scripts. It seems although you might be new here, you definitely have some skin in the game so far as writing goes.

Look forward to seeing more of your work.

Take care man.

Shawn.....><


Thanks. I actually posted a couple screenplays a few years ago then took them off when they got optioned. ive been in and out of the hollywood game. very close to production on a couple of projects but, for one reason or another, things fell through. What a surprise. Now that my relationship with my agent has ended...long story...ill be posting more stuff on here. currently working on my first script without some kind of supernatural or sci-fi element. it's a political drama/comedy. uh... wish me luck.



Check out my short film, GRIEF, from Fugo Studios, at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJxL-OqvILk&list=HL1336781751&feature=mh_lolz

Check out the trailer for my film, SERPENT, coming soon to a theatre near you from Mind Venture Pictures. http://www.vimeo.com/16410439

I will reciprocate all reviews.
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