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Alex_212
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Hi guys,

I thought i would bring this to the top again to show you the final Cut of "Serial Killer"

I have passed my thoughts onto the producer and feel some parts do need a little work though it was made on a budget of next to nil so I cant expect too much.

Hope you enjoy it.

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Must be great seeing your name on a film

Good work, Alex!


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What! No nudity.

Wasn't sure about the music score or the ending, especially the scream but like Dan said...must be great to see it on film.

Well done, Alex.
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Thanks Dan and Steve.

Yep great to see the finished product and I also have others doing this screenplay so a few versions will be good to see.

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Hi All,

Here is another version of Serial Killer produced by Lazaro Gonzales.

Hope you enjoy it.

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Alex I thought this was well written with the action, I could see that you wanted to build up the tension. But this one could have been a bit shorter, I did like the ending, just wish it got there sooner.  
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I didn't get it. Psycho. Keep writing. It seemed longer than two pages. =)


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Quoted from Chris Ramos
I didn't get it. Psycho. Keep writing. It seemed longer than two pages. =)


Hey Chris, what is it that you didn't get?

Alex


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Hey Chris, what is it that you didn't get?

Alex


I don't get the story. Why would he stab a cereal box that's expired; I get that it imitates psycho but the cereal box? I don't get it. In Psycho, does the guy say "it's expired" somewhere in the movie? Because then it makes sense. Keep writing!


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Oh!!! Serial Killer! I get it now. It all makes sense now, but still you need bring
more attention to the title because I got the joke a day after I read it.


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Quoted from Chris Ramos
Oh!!! Serial Killer! I get it now. It all makes sense now, but still you need bring
more attention to the title because I got the joke a day after I read it.


Hey Chris,

Glad you got it in the end. The screenplay was originally titled Cereal Killer, though I had so many complaints that it gave the ending away so it was changed to Serial Killer.

The thread is titled Serial Killer, the title page has Serial Killer on it and apart from putting Cereal Killer on his forehead there wasn't much that could be done.

Every person that has read It and watched the video, clicked straight away, so I think it works as it is. Sorry.

Alex


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The video had no tension and some questionable music choices, some pretty bad ADR too.

On script, seems more like an SNL piece than anything else to me. Not reading anything before reading the short, I knew where you were going with it.

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