Didn't make *sniff* me cry.

Are these supposed to be two different links? They appear to link to the same YouTube video.

I read comments about dialogue needing to change so I went back to read the script to see if dialogue changed between the script and finished product. Scrtipt isn't there. Did you change the dialogue? I felt what was spoken fit the story.

Found the other one (kite) at the web site. The production value of the kite version trumped the book version but I give the acting nod to the book version. Yet both revealed what that young girl was dealing with and that comes from your writing.

http://shortwars.org/index.php/film

Here it is one link to both versions.

Yeah, I removed the script since I sold the rights and all.
I liked the ending in both - in the script it's vague and many got a bit confused asking me if Dad was a ghost and if he wrote "Never let go" on the kite himself.

So, Clorox, you like the Wilmington's version better?

I don't think I like one over the other in a big way but if I was scoring on several factors I would have scored Wilmingtom higher. The production was bigger on Wilmington. Title sequence, etc. felt more like a movie from that perspective. High shots at the beach. The beach kite scene was stronger and that made the finish stronger. But I think they held some shots too long. They made better use of the kite where I felt the kite was more of a tie between father and daughter. The teacher meeting scene was equal although I think the redefining line in Wilmington was a bit condescending. A grown woman redefining is far different than a child.

I watched the Wilmington version and there was some quality filmmaking on show. I thought the young girl was excellent and loved the use of drones. Maybe a little overdone on the drone use, but not a real gripe.

I enjoyed the story and the vivid colours throughout.

Well done, Khamanna!

Hey, thanks, guys! I'll take your suggestions into account - looks like I'm the only one voting for Del Tech anyway.

Clorox - yeah, the dinner shot in particular was long. It could have been easily addressed in the edit - don't know why they don't see what we see.

And sliding that box out from under her bed...

Congrats to you!

Thanks, Don, so much!
Makes me very happy to see this one up here.

@Dave, thanks!)

Hey Kham, well done.

Very nice production qualities in this.

It's a script with simple, big heart. Personally I don't think she goes over the top ( as per logline)  I think in the real world the appropriate use of old possessions, recalling memories, is a fair approach to the loss of a loved one.

All the best

Just watched it. It was great. Sad and heartfelt... congratulations Kahmanna!

Congrats, great little production.

Congratulations! A lovely short film.