I remember reading this.  Glad to see it filmed.

So congrats

Ghostie

Fantastic.


Really felt it should have had one last hiccup right at the end, though.


Still, got so much out of so little.

Congratulations on getting this filmed!

I think it's a bit drawn out, it relies on a lot of tense pauses where nothing is really happening. A few seconds trim here and there could help or more action.

The reflection in the mirror is spot on; a great touch! If we would have seen the face it would have dissapointing and not just because it's low budget or anything, but because our imagination can always do more. As it was, this was really creepy. I think his hiding place could have been better though!

The glimpse of the monster's hand is a bit off. It looks funny, like a kid's ET costume or something which takes the edge off the moment but this is still a great short.

I agree as well with the above comment, this is screaming out for a final hiccup right at the end of the credits!

Congratulations again on getting this produced.

-Mark

Music was the star in this one - anyways nice to watch.
I just wondered why he didn't hear her scream when she looked under the bed.

Thanks for watching, guys!

I agree with a few of the comments. I don't think there was a solid "map" of the bedroom versus the boyfriend's hiding spot. And if he was indeed as close to the bedroom as it seems, he would have heard his girlfriend scream. That's why it never says she screams in the script -- she doesn't actually get the chance to cry out, so he doesn't hear her death. But in the film, it's clear she's belting out a loud one, so he would've known she was in trouble and come running.

I can see the rubber-textured hand being kind of hokey, but for a no-budget film, I've seen worse.

The reason for there not being a hiccup at the very end is simple -- the sip of water cured the monster's hiccups.

Keep in mind no one really invested in this film financially or made a paycheck from it, so this was all a labor of love. I'm really proud of it and I've seen it probably more than anyone, but it's a little bittersweet for me that this is the end of the road. Onto the next thing!