Quoted from TonyDionisio Good link. She looks good,  I'd bang her ;

Thanks mate, I'll pass on the compliment. I think we're working with her in a crew capacity on the next film... depends if she says yes or not.

Dustin,

The link in your signature to All About Janet, doesn't work for me.

Quoted from Nomad Dustin, The link in your signature to All About Janet, doesn't work for me.

Cheers mate. I don't have any idea how that has happened.

It's fixed. For some reason the link wasn't working with the 'www.' Thanks again.

Yo, finally. Congrats to you and your crew.

Sound is a bit quiet on "notebook standard" but I don't know how this works and if there's even an opportunity to make it louder from the start... I think I see it again with loudspeakers

I felt that the actors did a good job. The director too.

The club scene was quite modern, didn't expected that from the script. What was it about with the splitscreen? Was it just for bringing in some agility?

Seems to me "you" played safe with some points: I expected Des to act supernatural, wasn't she sitting on a shelf or sth. whispering her demonic shit in the script...

It was a good choice to change the second plot point from car-accident to slip on a plate. It much more relates to the subject.

I expected Janet to have some spasms though.

I wasn't sure about the first "slow fade", apart from that, how you begun the film was very good.

I dislike the door movement. That came across a bit amateur. The door moves and scene begins stuff. Don't know if it was once or twice, but writer, I guess that was your fault

I wouldn't watch short movies if I wasn't on this board; the passion's visible, go on.

Good luck Dustin, great start I guess.

Ps: There were two other points: To me it seems like the picture went darker, greyer at the half. I liked it a lot. The quotation was specific but I couldn't get something out of it while it was different, still, says the one-time-watcher.

Congrats from me as well, Dustin!

I wish I could read the script again but obviously it's not here for the reading anymore. So, bear in mind some of my comments will be off the cuff and may not be as well informed as they could be.

From a purely viewing experience there's a lot to like about this and it has a pro feel, so well done.

I did find some parts of the film a little dark (lighting wise) that could be an artistic choice I'm not sure... or perhaps the fact I viewed it on my tablet. Also for a short film the frequent fade to blacks were a little discombobulating for my liking. Mind you I'm in the middle of watching Birdman and was dying for a breather with all that continuous action.  

I would have put the Fellini quote in at the end - again that's personal choice. Btw Dustin it says Fellino with an 'o'?? Is that a typo or some variable spelling?

And why the updated logline mentioning she's an 'office worker'? Seems irrelevant.

I was impressed with the nightclub scene (how many extras did you get for that?) it looked very realistic considering I'm sure you weren't filming with a packed crowd but the illusion was a good one. I was similarly impressed with the actress playing the role of Janet - terrific performance and the husband (though a thankless role) did extremely well with his part too. Des, I found a little one-note in her performance - even the devil has light and shade surely, but I reckon that was a directorial decision.

Overall, good stuff - very pro looking and I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with next.

I'm interested in what you think of the final result too, what you were happy with, what you might have changed, learned for the next one etc.

Congrats again.  

Congratulations Dustin! Well done, mate.

Actions speak louder than words.

Dark theme's as I'd expected mate, an interesting take on the plight of the related carer and them losing their lives, really liked the device of her alter ego... felt a little like you had externalised both the good Angel and the bad Angel.

Good stuff, congrats.

Congrats on getting this made! Not sure whether the short was my cup of tea, but it's easy to notice it's well done.

I remember you mentioning on the Smackhead short thread that you wrote the lead role for the actor who plays the husband here, inspired by his performance on this short. I can see why, that was terrific acting.

Contrary to Prussian, I quite liked the scenes starting with the door moving. It gave the room a strong isolated feeling imo, worked well especially with what the camera was focusing on. It's probably necessary to show that Janet isn't at his bedside too often, too.

I wasn't a fan of the fade to blacks, except the last one that threw the quote in there. I thought that added an interesting layer to the short. I really liked the final shot too.

What's the plan with the short now? Going for festivals or? Good luck anyway.

I read the original script. I see you made quite a few changes to the one I read - I don't remember the club scene for one, then Des in the original was there fairly from the beginnig I think. Not sure if I liked the changes but I liked the movie.

Neat job, congrats, Dustin!

I really liked Fellini's words placement and the ending was quite powerful.

British English was a challenge for me. But that's just me I'm sure.

Excellent work, all around.  I especially like that Janet looks blank most of the time and sees herself as victim ("look what you made me do") -- and when she's talking with her alter ego, Janet has a sort of empty stare while Des's face seems to be always vibrant, sultry and in deliberate motion.  The scene where Des shows no reflection in her compact's mirror is nicely creepy but the scene (around 6:30 - 6:50) where Des, speaking, moves in and out of darkness is a marvel, hypnotic and beautiful.   Martin is also a wonderful creation; great soulful eyes and a mess of bodily functions, he eats hungrily, he wants to live.
The ending has a good karmic justice sense to it but that is transcended by our final look at Janet's moving eyes, her wildly, helplessly searching into the emptiness -- without inspiration.
That speaks an overflowing mouthful for us would-be creative types.  

Thanks for the kind comments. All I can see is how amateur it is. I was actually dreading the reviews from here, so was pleasantly surprised to see they are mainly positive.

I feel the direction lacked, the cinematography is lacklustre, make-up poor and the sound is not as good as it could have been. All things that I am rectifying with Smackhead. There were too many scenes where he was injected with the heroin.

Positives were the actors, I believe all three did a great job, with Val and Benji shining. Benji is playing the main part in Smackhead too and is doing an amazing job so far. He's one of those actors that is prepared to go the extra mile for the sake of the performance. I'd like to work with Val again on something too as she can play almost any part.

The music was also good. All original songs and music composed/written from the ground up by a few friends. One of them, Anthony Niner, the other producer.

For the nightclub scene we did have around 20 people. All we had to pay for that place was 40 pounds, and that was for wages to the member of bar staff that was there to supervise the bar. The club came free.

The credits got messed up because we had to switch editors half way through post.

We filmed it within 24 hours. We did the bulk of the shoot on day 1 in 9 hours. The did the nightclub scene the next day and was finished in 4 hours.

I think it takes around four hours for our DP to set up a shot now, let alone shooting a whole scene, lol. Not that that's a bad thing, it's a good thing, a very good thing. Story, cinematography and sound... three essentials you don't want to get wrong.

Quoted from DustinBowcot All I can see is how amateur it is. I was actually dreading the reviews from here, so was pleasantly surprised to see they are mainly positive.

I think that's common with perfectionists. I'm the same way. I cried (not really, but almost) when I first saw the footage for the pirate short. Same thing with writing. Some people think their stuff is gold and refuse to see any flaws with their work. Others are highly critical about their work and go on to shoot/write another just to prove that they can do better. You belong in the second group, so I only predict your films getting better and better. You have the drive to make sure it will happen.

I think AAJ was a great start! Congratulations.  

You are being too hard on yourself Dustin but I'm sure you'll channel it well.

Anthony