Bert, did you ever get this produced in the end? See you mentioned you had some interest in it last year.

Quoted from Britman Bert, did you ever get this produced in the end?

Well, "in the end" is a relative term in movie time.  Like basketball minutes.

He was upfront that any real activity was likely to occur sometime this year.  I am still in touch with the guy, and there are reasons that I have confidence in his abilities.  He has a past track record that impresses.

Thanks for asking, though.  Unlike some, I prefer to keep pending work under my hat until there is actually something to show for it.  I would certainly update here if there was anything to watch, but prior to a finished film, the rest is really all talk and fluff.

Very well done, my friendo. Very tight, not a line wasted. Smart dialogue lines. Fascinating mythology that blends the blues world with the voodoo world.

My only quip, which has been mentioned before by other readers, is that the exact terms of the deal start to become a tad blurry near the end. Now that I read your explanation, I get it and I'm thinking that maybe, if I was a blues fan, I would have had a deeper understanding of the piece without any explanations needed.

Still, very solid piece.  

Thanks for looking, Z, and nice to see you back around.

Quoted from Mr.Z ...if I was a blues fan, I would have had a deeper understanding of the piece without any explanations needed.

Yeah, I acknowledge that as both a weakness and a strength of this one.  I was shooting for broad appeal, but particular appeal for a niche audience.  You kind of straddle a line with that approach, sometimes.

Nice to hear that someone in the broader audience could still get something from it.

I'll be on the lookout for any MP submissions I might have missed should they start popping up.  Cheers.  

Hey Bert,

Somehow this one slipped through the cracks. Don't know if you're still looking for input, seeing it was written a few years ago but I like your stuff (especially the lesbian western thingy) so here goes.

First thing I noticed was lotsa white on those pages. A 14-page short can feel very long sometimes but this one was such a breeze to read, minimal fuss but enough to make the story and characters engaging.

The writing was, as I've come to expect from you, really good. However...

Quoted Text A warped shingle on the door -- OPEN -- seems more a challenge than an invitation.

Cute and all but...really?

There was also a few pieces of dialogue where I wasn't sure whether there were typos, or it was just slang. I will obviously give you the benefit of the doubt.

The story itself started off real good, I liked the how easily you created the mood and the setting. The lost record was a good angle but it seemed that you switched it up after that, turning the attention to the guitar (which I guess was a metaphor for Jean's soul - or maybe not a metaphor). This all felt like a cross between Angel Heart and the music video for Radiohead's "Just" (and if you haven't seen that one, then do it now) - and I mean that in a good way.

But I would personally have stuck with the record, I thought that was real hook of the story because of the mysterious folk lore and what not. The "I sold my soul and now I want it back" thingy has been done before, you know?

Anyway, I was entertained, so good stuff.

Cheers
Rob

Hey, Snipe.  Thanks for looking this one over.

Quoted from sniper Cute and all but...really?

I have no justification.  Just amusing myself.  Guilty as charged.

Quoted from sniper There was also a few pieces of dialogue where I wasn't sure whether there were typos, or it was just slang. I will obviously give you the benefit of the doubt.

Yeah, I don't attempt dialects all that often, but I know the south well enough that I felt comfortable with that here.

Quoted from sniper But I would personally have stuck with the record...

I know what you are saying here.  Before I even had anything on the page, the seed of the story was just the idea of the record alone.  Sometimes the story just goes where it goes, but I agree the record itself is the strongest element here.

Quoted from sniper This all felt like a cross between Angel Heart and the music video for Radiohead's "Just" (and if you haven't seen that one, then do it now)

So, you are one of very few people who could direct me to watch a video and have me actually track it down for a look.  I was not disappointed.

And what is really cool, I found that if you turn the volume way up, you can hear the man say, “Dreamscale has a new script.”

I would write more, but I am suddenly feeling the need for a nap.

Cheers, Rob.  Thanks.

Quoted from bert “Dreamscale has a new script.”

Hahahaha - best theory I've ever heard.

OK, guys...what the heck is going on here?

Dreamscale doesn't post his "new scripts" here anymore.  Nowadays, I only post them in my head, where the reviews are all 100% glowing!