Anthony,

Good little read.  It is a bit confusing in the end because the dog only barks, which can create ambiguity.  And if I were Antoine, I might be a mite pissed that the dog is checking up on me.  I mean, if Antoine had missed a report or two or hadn't checked in, it might be appropriate and funny.  If the dog is checking up just to check up, then some kind of interchange?  

In any case, it makes for a good little story.  Good luck.

Best
Richard

Hey Richard thanks for taking a quick look, apreciated.

I'll relook at the end make sure it's clearer.

Anthony

Anthony,

I like the minimalist approach here. No explanations, just intimations of what might be going on.

It's easy to forget there's a difference between reading a script and watching the film version. The point here is the humor of it all, especially when Antoine and the Dog converse. The dog turning to look at Antoine could be very funny. As always, it has to be done by competent people. Otherwise it could fall flat. In this case, comic timing would be critical.

I like this line: "excitement leaching from his demeanor." Leaching's a good word.

Regards, Henry

Hi Henry and thanks for taking a look at the script, appreciated.

Really pleased you like it, and the humour... it was mostly an experiment in humour for me as it's a genre I don't write in frequently, so glad it works.

Just have to find someone to make it now

Anthony