Worse Off by Richard Russell - Short, Comedy - Welcome to the latest reality game show where the audience chooses who is WORSE OFF. 10 pages - pdf, format

Hi Richard,

That was... weird. Not sure what the point was exactly. A strange game show alright but I don't see the point. To show that we as people like to judge other by their misfortunes? I dunno. Also was very dialogue driven and nothing happening.

Some parts did make me chuckle though.

Best of luck.

Minor
Pg 1 Why not specify the age and gender of the EMCEE?
Pg 1 What is "middle of the middle"?  Why does it matter what Steve wears?
Pg 2: problems -> problem's
Pg 4: "...by anyone's lights" Not sure what this means.

Major
Ok, so we have a four pathetic people, with a break-dancing Zander at the end.  Other than the obvious escalation of maladies, what's the point? Is a falling man with no arms and legs supposed to be funny?  (OK, I chuckled when he fell).

Q: What do you call a guy who has no arms or legs and hangs on the wall?
A: Art

Q: What do you call a guy who has no arms or legs and lays on the porch?
A: Matt

Knock at door
Billy: Mrs. Smith, can Johnny come out to play baseball?
Mrs. Smith: You know he has no arms and legs?
Billy: Right, but we need a third base.

All,

Thanks for the comments.  This was an attempt at a bit of fun poked at the 'victim' generation.  It seems everyone strives for victim status, and these people pushed the envelope, with unexpected consequences.  If it missed the mark, well, that's what this forum is all about.

Thanks,
Best
Richard

In this world you have made people's misfortune or odd behavior  big stuff in the entertainment business, to me it kind of resembles the news you see nowadays, most if not all of the big stories are ... well...depressing.

One question though, if Rachel was so  addicted to the news wouldn't she just listen to the radio/tv?

Of course she would, but she thought not seeing is enough because her goal is victim hood not overcoming an addiction