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Gary by Royle Miralles - Short, Drama, Comedy - Young woman attempts to reunite with surfer boyfriend after a year's absence against her better judgment and her parent's admonitions. 13 pages - pdf, format
Minor distractions - Is a VW Bug important? - A few times you misuse the singular possessive apostrophe or the plural,: parents' neighbors' - Why would you call it a SHACK in the slugline, the call it a COTTAGE elsewhere? Just say the cottage is crappy. - Pg 6 has a flashback? - Pg 7: the two sentences "Gets up...her feet" should be merged into one. - Pg 8: Another flashback, we presume? Or this more seems like a flash-forward? - Pg 8: Why not give the sister a name? - Pg 8 (and others): The mother, and to a lesser extent the father, sure are preachy and long-winded. Annoyingly so.
Major distraction - All it took was a shave, a haircut and breakfast to melt her heart? My kinda gal!
Good Pg 8: knot of wood stares back at her.
Random note - Not sure if you're male or female (but it really doesn't not matter) but you write with a clear feminine viewpoint and style. Just thought you might wanna know how your tone and POV resonate.