Alffy, thanks so much for the read, and I did like your trick of father and son in the same building, when I wrote it I thought about it but that'd imply the son had something to do with it (which was never my intention), but since now you brought it up, I could use it as to show how ruthless Dad is by doing a heist at his son's future employer even though his son didn't know about it, ha, that'd be brilliant, thanks. But again, maybe they were in the same bank, who knows? Time, floor, etc.
To answer your first question, at the beginning I put a map on the fridge as part of Mom's "errands" (being a getaway driver, not the chase kind), and at the end of the day she waved it to dad's face saying it's not marked clear enough so she missed one of her other errands (dry clean pickup), and at the end of the script, they talked about their haul (which is the take from the heist), I hope that answers your question. I will have to make some change to it. But the thing is I wanted to write it short and sly.
Thanks again alffy. |