I just checked it and yes there does seem to be. I will check my dropbox when I get home and let you know when it's fixed. Not sure what the issue is.

Id love to check this one out too. If you could re-enable the link, that would be great. Muchos thanks.

Link fixed, let me know if there are any issues.

I was hoping this one would burst out at me as being awesome but that didnt quite happen I'm afraid. Might have been the Fargo context around the script as I went in expecting that ilk and for me the characters need a nudge to get closer to that benchmark.  The first three pages felt like pretty standard genre fare also.
But you have a great idea here with the language troubles and the phrase book - just think you could swing the bat a bit harder and see what you can come up with to add a few more layers to the characters as they seem thin. Sure its a short and you dont have a lot of time, but you can trim some of this eg the waiting room and Tanaka scene could really be condensed. If he's a tattoed Japanese dude sitting in a room and she is a muscled hit woman sitting opposite, there's a bodyguard on the side and he throws her a photograph and a phrase book, the audience can tell what is going on in about five seconds instead of three pages which leaves you time to play with the characters a bit more whilst still keeping the same plot.
Given Gwens statement  " Twenty years I’ve been in this business  ... " on page 6, I think you could add in more "shit" events ... to make her claim more substantive as her day whilst crap, couldve been a lot worse. A dumb example would be if shes one of these gluten free types and goes to buy some food but screws up the translation and eats a pound of gluten  ... then whilst she's following the Mark, she breaks out in hives, vomits or whatever and has to cancel the hit or invert and he HELPS her if she's ill then her determination is weakened ... or whatever.

Thats probably enough blab yeah? Thanks for letting me take a peek. In the main I enjoyed it.

All the best with it.

Thanks for the read and comments, Jez.

I agree that I could add something more to the character. Will have a look and see what I can come up with.

Cheers.

No probs ... as with any comments, you'll have a gut feel on which ones to ignore and which ones to scrutinise a little deeper. Do think you've got the ingredients for a decent murderous fish out of water black comedy feature  here.

Warren, good job! I enjoyed your story. I have only one minor point...as a dark comedy, you should emphasize the comedic side of it...at the very beginning, you have an American hit woman, a Japanese boss and a Japanese bodyguard/interpreter....create a comedy of misunderstanding scene with the hit woma trying to speak Japanese and the two Japanese attempting to speak English...this will give the readers the essence of the story, which is comedy. Just an idea.
Thank you for reading my comment. Get the short ready for a feature.
All my best,
Fausto

Thanks for the read, Fausto.

Appreciated as always.