Thanks for the very thorough feedback, Nomad.

I replied to Don and Warren up above with my intention, if that helps.

EDIT: English is my first language. I LOLed when you asked that.

Ben,

Interesting, strange... imaginative. The tribe is part of some nouveau performance where the cast members are not privy to the show? Did I get that right? Anyway, neat concept if you ask me. Perhaps as an upscale holographic arena in the not too distant future where elite members of society blow their wad to be entertained.

The Vaudeville Dancers are a nice touch as well.

Actually, you could probably turn this on its head for maximum effect. Perhaps, if this was stationed in a colossal Spiegeltent and set in the late 19th century, it could serve as a rival to Paris' Le Théâtre du Grand-Guignol. Steampunk is the theme behind the curtain, and it's rife with magicians from Egypt and Iran pulling the puppet strings. OK... now it's turning into a feature production.

Truthfully, this put me in mind of Cavalia's 'Odysseo', probably the coolest thing I've seen as a live performance, here's a link about the show, and the story they incorporate into the performance... see Cavalia at all cost if it comes to your to city, you won't be disappointed.

This in itself states that you're not alone in thinking anything is possible. Keep at it, the imagination element is definitely there... all the best.

http://www.cavalia.net/en/odysseo/the-story

Canis you are spot on with your interpretation. Thanks for the link too, had no idea about any of this stuff.

Anytime, glad you found it useful. The Grand-Guignol, or Large Puppet arena appeared as a natural theme within your script... I decided to roll the dice under the assumption that's what you were going for. Perhaps not the insane horror element the original theatre incorporated, but a live action sequence none the less.

Curious that the Grand-Guignol inadvertently made its appearance just before the Halloween OWC... things most needed to help stoke the imagination. The other being the 'Relatos de Presidio' – Mexican True Crime comic book series... which is lewd, crude, and disturbing to boot.

Cheers...

Hey Ben.

It went over my head, but looks like that's the thought behind it - to loose your reader)

One thing I can't understand - if it's a theatre play then how do we see the dense jungle? If it's staged we'll know right away - it's a staged thing. But perhaps you want to be tricky with it. At first you show the theatre, then the setting is super real and then back to theatre again. So, that must mean something to us - you say)

Some notes.

Like some others, I'm not at all sure this is any kind of coherent narrative.  I have no idea why Hera would want to leave her tribe.  What this means in the context of an intermission is beyond my ken.  So, I don't much care about Hera or her newborn.  One escapes from or to something; she just runs.  The stuff with embers seems tossed in because the rest of the script doesn't seem magical.  

Best
Richard

Uh.

It was like the first time I dropped acid, subwayed in from the suburbs and walked around Times Square on a very busy, electric Saturday night.

A memorable experience.

R