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Alex J. Cooper
Posted: January 26th, 2007, 5:50am
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This wasn't Scifi-ish at all! Good formatting, but poor story.
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Old Time Wesley
Posted: January 26th, 2007, 12:28pm
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Quoted from dogglebe
The idea of adding the lunar shots and the movie theater scene together was obviously a joke and it was cute in a WTF sort of way. Still, I think scripts like this bring the OWC down. Phil
The point being avoid stupid subjects and people will keep it the way you want it. I see this happen everytime because you guys act silly on the thread therefore nobody takes it serious.
Anyway, Crunch Crunch was a pretty good scene. If this writer were to write sketch comedy he or she would write some pretty entertaining scripts.
The one line I found quite funny was the description "Nasa style" it is just so absurdly placed.
At the same time, I agree with Alex that having an insert of space doesn't make it Sci Fi.
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michel
Posted: January 31st, 2007, 10:43am
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Thanks for all your reviews.
I know this one wasn't my cup of tea and I failed treating Sci-Fi.
Kevan puts the finger on all the metaphors I wanted to line up. Thanks to him.
the CRUNCH CRUNCH was in fact the noise of the eaten popcorn while the film played in the theatre.
I hope I'll do better next time.
Michel
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alffy
Posted: January 31st, 2007, 12:33pm
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This was quite funny. Not sure about some of the descriptions, too many 'like...' for me. Nice opening and then change of direction. Sci-fi and Popcorn? guess so, but maybe dropping the 'opc' would be more like it. lol.
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michel
Posted: February 1st, 2007, 6:35am
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Quoted from mcornetto
Also the end ... what exactly was she looking for?
I thought I was clear enough explaining she was pretending looking for her lost popcorn.
Michel
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mcornetto
Posted: February 1st, 2007, 9:47pm
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I thought I was clear enough explaining she was pretending looking for her lost popcorn.
Michel
yeah, got that. But if she wasn't looking for her lost popcorn then what was she looking for?
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michel
Posted: February 2nd, 2007, 2:55am
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This was quite funny but maybe dropping the 'opc' would be more like it. lol.
Forgive my lack of English but what is "opc"?
Michel
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