Hey Matt,

I liked it. This one was easier for me to read/follow. I wished Adrian and Mark had been in it more. I like the idea of setting someone up for a joke, but did he think about how far the joke would go? Like, getting Graham beat up and or getting themselves fired for starting this? (Sorry I look to the bad side of everything) I feel like once he got to the convention the ones there didn't offer enough humor. Maybe if Graham had been stuck in a elevator with the characters or actually have him on stage trying to sell it, but he never came across as an idiot as he did try to make a selling point.

I liked the characters, but I wanted to see more humor (something like Tommy boy, the bosses son, whatever, to join the company they mess with him so messes up so bad type thing). At least shown the two at the beginning again, if you're gonna be mean I like like to see the mean pan out if setting  Graham up.

Still I liked it I read it rather quickly which is saying a lot for me.