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Weird Shit by Steven Clark - Short, Comedy - Rousted out of his bedroom in just his socks and underwear, a nerdy teen has a lot of explaining to do to the F.B.I. 4 pages
production: Three actors, bedroom, interrogation room, minimal budget - pdf format
This idea came to me last night so I just wrote it up real quick. I meant it as a little nod and a wink to us screenwriters. God knows I've searched for some crazy shit.
Me too, Steve! I often think if they're looking at my browser history they'd think what a strange collection of 'weird shit'. All for creative purposes, of course.
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It's very good. Very enjoyable. The only thing I think is you could have drawn it out just a teeny bit longer and the ending was a bit abrupt.
I do get that you need to balance it however, otherwise you kill the joke.
Me too, Steve! I often think if they're looking at my browser history they'd think what a strange collection of 'weird shit'. All for creative purposes, of course.
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It's very good. Very enjoyable. The only thing I think is you could have drawn it out just a teeny bit longer and the ending was a bit abrupt.
I do get that you need to balance it however, otherwise you kill the joke.
Agent Orange.
Libby,
Thanks for reading. I see what you're saying about the ending. A teeny bit longer maybe. I really didn't want there to be too much to this - I was afraid I'd think of another joke and have to figure out a way to shoehorn it in. Hopefully it's balanced well enough.
Hey, Steven - Funny shit. My only gripe is that you gave in too quick. I think it could be drawn just a bit with some more play on Agent Orange. Nicely done, as is, but could be more.
BTW - I'm so hesitant to search certain subjects and you nailed it. Thanks for recognizing our plight!
I like the idea. I think Chad should protest his innocence for a while longer when being interrogated, hence draw out the humour for a little longer. it seems the federal agents are too quick to release him, especially seeing as they went to all the effort to monitor and arrest him in the first place.
Hey, Steven - Funny shit. My only gripe is that you gave in too quick. I think it could be drawn just a bit with some more play on Agent Orange. Nicely done, as is, but could be more.
BTW - I'm so hesitant to search certain subjects and you nailed it. Thanks for recognizing our plight!
Thanks, I'm glad it mostly worked for you. You're probably right, Agent Orange could have been done a little more. Guess I was just being economical. Funny, ever since Back To School and Dean Martin I always had a thing for funny names.
I like the idea. I think Chad should protest his innocence for a while longer when being interrogated, hence draw out the humour for a little longer. it seems the federal agents are too quick to release him, especially seeing as they went to all the effort to monitor and arrest him in the first place.
Nice idea though and well wrote.
Thanks for the comments, Marvin. I understand what you're saying about stretching this out. A few people have said that, and had this been a serious piece I probably would have done that. But, being a comedy, I wanted it light and quick so I just sort of got in and got out. Again, thanks for the read.
The punchline is a bit naff but at only 4 pages it just about qualifies itself.
I know, damning with faint praise personified
Thanks, Colonel. I think. No -- really appreciate the read, as always. Maybe some day soon I'll have something a little bigger and broader for you to sink your teeth into.
Hey, Dude. Gave this a read. Not sure how I feel about it.
On one hand, it's written well. It moved fast, no hang ups. Not overly visual, but solid enough.
Storywise... This just kinda left me hanging. It seems like this joke had some more legs, but you cut it off so quick. The two detective's gave up far too easily. After Chad reveals that he's a writer, the detective's should pry a bit more. Ask what he's writing. Ask why he's researching granny porn. Maybe Chad replies "The porn, oh that's not for my writing. That's for masturbating." Lol
Still, not a bad effort. Just needs something more.
Hey, Dude. Gave this a read. Not sure how I feel about it.
On one hand, it's written well. It moved fast, no hang ups. Not overly visual, but solid enough.
Storywise... This just kinda left me hanging. It seems like this joke had some more legs, but you cut it off so quick. The two detective's gave up far too easily. After Chad reveals that he's a writer, the detective's should pry a bit more. Ask what he's writing. Ask why he's researching granny porn. Maybe Chad replies "The porn, oh that's not for my writing. That's for masturbating." Lol
Still, not a bad effort. Just needs something more.
Thanks for reading, Zack. Yeah, I guess it definitely can be extended. Mostly everyone who read it said so. I wrote it real quick one night in between things, so I didn't give it too much attention. Maybe I should have. At least drag out the granny porn! haha.
Anyways, just got an email about this script, so let's see if anything happens.