Some notes.
This is both good and not so good. I like the dialogue at times. Dad manages to convey his meaning to the audience even though it doesn't mean the same to his son. It's not so good in that it telegraphs how this is going to end. And I think with some work, you can find some scenes that would be a bit more intriguing. After all, dad's had some time to think about this, right?
Best Richard |