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Posted: December 11th, 2018, 1:17pm Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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Mabel by Brandi Self - Short, Drama, Fantasy - A depressed young man struggles to keep up with his girlfriend who keeps disappearing at the most inopportune times. 9 pages - pdf format

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I write stuff I think is cool, just like you do.

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Hello Brandi. I liked your script. The story kept me guessing every page and I thought I knew what was going on but you proved me wrong, which I feel was exactly what you were going for. The subtle changes in characters and detouring dialogue was written in great detail and very easy to follow. I saw everything happening and was only confused from Johnny's point of view which again, I'm guessing was intentional.  


Good stuff.


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Hi Brandi,

Very well written. I recommend a read of this one.

"..He stubs the dormant cigarette out. Looks up at the grey sky
sorrowfully.
Her hand finds his. They entangle as the rain begins to
fall. Tighter, as the moment takes them hostage...."

Tighter, as the moment takes them hostage... Love it!!!!

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