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Posted: January 13th, 2019, 3:54pm Report to Moderator
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Miss Kowalski by Louise Deschamps - Short, Drama - An eccentric old woman, Miss Kowalski, and her neglected 8-year-old neighbor, Clara, have a surprise encounter that impacts both of their lives. 12 pages - pdf format

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Louise: I think you have a header problem out of the gate:


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INT. MISS KOWALSKI'S HOUSE, LIVING ROOM - DAY

A beautiful summer day.

From inside a window, someone looks out at some neighbors
who are moving out. A little girl (CLARA, 8, messy hair,
dirty clothes) sits quietly on the lawn, watching her FATHER
(30s, long hair) pack things into a truck with his BUDDY
(30s). The father's girlfriend (JADE, 20s, attractive) helps
out, occasionally giving orders.


The action takes place outside. Your header is INT. At a minimum, I think you need a POV here. But I think it best just to start with

EXT. LAWN - DAY


INT. MISS KOWALSKI'S HOUSE, LIVING ROOM - DAY

A beautiful summer day.

A little girl (CLARA, 8, messy hair, dirty clothes) sits quietly on the lawn, watching her FATHER
(30s, long hair) pack things into a truck with his BUDDY
(30s).

The father's girlfriend (JADE, 20s, attractive) helps
out, occasionally giving orders.

Then go inside the house.



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