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Homewood Drive by Dominic Cerasi - Short, Drama - On a calm Sunday morning, a man takes a long drive- along the way he reminisces with the girl he loves, about their past together, the present they're in, and where the future will lead... 14 pages - pdf format

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This was pretty good. Nice little melancholy story. I got the Willoughby reference, if that's what it even was.  Just watch some typos: Martin constantly says "Would of" instead of "Would have." But I liked the dialog. It was a good exercise in dialog between characters. Back and forth kind of thing. It also kept me guessing what the ending would be. Had a feeling that Ann was just a memory. Perhaps she died crossing the railroad tracks? That's what I was thinking. Then I thought perhaps Sloan would actually be in the passenger seat. Good character-driven script.

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