Quoted from eldave1 This was interesting.  My script was set in the High Sierras (Bishop CA). An Indian film student asked for permission to shoot it based in Bombay. I thought - what the heck - go for it. He sent me the link yesterday to his finished film. Asked for my comments. I told home kudos other than several scenes were way too dark. He responded I know - we had no electricity - our generator is broken. Made me feel special towards him - busting his ass to shoot a film without power - I'm guessing he's a determined young man. His work is here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wIKKww-boUk

Congrats, this will be some lunchtime viewing for me.

A lot of good stuff in the film.

Shame the unlit scenes left me completely in the dark.

Quoted from LC A lot of good stuff in the film. Shame the unlit scenes left me completely in the dark.

I know, I would have liked to see them  - I really felt for the dude - (busted generator).

Quoted from Warren Congrats, this will be some lunchtime viewing for me.

Cool

Note - do to the lack of electricity - you'll only be able to see about half of it

Everything in the light looks great, unfortunate about the night scenes or this really would have been solid all round.

Great effort on the filmmaker's part moving ahead without power.

Quoted from Warren Everything in the light looks great, unfortunate about the night scenes or this really would have been solid all round. Great effort on the filmmaker's part moving ahead without power.

Thanks - made me really realize that I have first world problems. I get pissed when the DVR fucks up. This dude is trying to shoot a film without juice.

Congrats, Dude! An inspiring effort from the filmmakers.

Quoted from Zack Congrats, Dude! An inspiring effort from the filmmakers.

Thanks, mate

Major congratulations, Dave. And kudos to the filmmaker.

Quoted from ghost and_ghostie gal Major congratulations, Dave. And kudos to the filmmaker.

Thanks!

Dave, I’m giving this a bump from 3 years ago!  It was actually featured today as the “Short Script of the Day”.  As always, your work is excellent. The formatting/slugs concise and spot on. I’m hoping to learn from osmosis reading your work on how to frame these scenes.  Now the story itself…I was hooked from the start. Very engaging story although I was suspicious of the deputy the moment he showed up. You wrote him with a little “cringe” factor seeping through. I’m also loved the theme of tribal (and warranted) justice. Some things withstand time and circumstance. The old man knew that. I had to chuckle at who the Spirit in the Sky turned out to be. But it’s so true isn’t it??  Anyway, lest you think I give glowing reviews to everything I read, I do not.  I usually just choose to not comment on things that don’t appeal to me whether storyline wise or format/presentation problems. I noticed this was an OWC entry. I’m curious to know what the parameters were that created this story.  Again, I enjoyed this a great deal - so glad it was featured as todays Short Story.

Filmamkers are inspirational.

This script was set on an American Indian Reservation. A young student filmaker from India asked permission to shoot this as an India version.

He completed it and asked me what I thought - told him well done other than several scenes were too dark. He replied - I know. We don't have electricity so there was no way to light the night scenes.  This made me feel spoiled and humble at the same time.

Anyway - not bad for no electricity.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wIKKww-boUk

Oh wow Dave, I didn’t read all the previous comments that it had been produced.  I watched and agree that some of the scenes are dark, but considering the hardship he did a good job.  I preferred your Native American version, but for a student he did an excellent job of converting to his culture.  I dream of the day I may see my characters come to life on the screen - it must be a wonderful feeling. Thanks for posting the link - so glad I came across this even if I was late for the party.

Quoted from kcranford Oh wow Dave, I didn’t read all the previous comments that it had been produced.  I watched and agree that some of the scenes are dark, but considering the hardship he did a good job.  I preferred your Native American version, but for a student he did an excellent job of converting to his culture.  I dream of the day I may see my characters come to life on the screen - it must be a wonderful feeling. Thanks for posting the link - so glad I came across this even if I was late for the party.

Thanks! Very kind of you

Hey Dave,

I think they did a nice job with this considering the budget. I really like the story here. The pacing and editing were great, they just need to work on their visuals a little. Congrats on getting it filmed!

James