Thought this was fairly good. It's dialog driven, wasn't sure where the story was going. By the end it read like something, or a scene, that was part of something bigger. But as for just being what it is, well-written.
The character descriptions of Adam and Sandra didn't seem to for their characters. That's a good thing, as I liked them more than their descriptions would let on. Their talk made them come across more as yuppies, but not in a bad way. It was a plus.
All in all good writing. good dialog, and good description. |