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ghost and_ghostie gal
Posted: September 26th, 2020, 12:52am
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It's fairly obvious you write well. I never stumbled, or had to re-read anything for clarification, it was all pretty smooth. The problem I saw, is we've seen this scene a gazillion times before. Maybe this was your intention. If so, fair enough. And yours as well, I liked it, so good job... I just didn't luv it.-A
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RogerN
Posted: October 16th, 2020, 11:58am
I enjoyed the read, very powerful. The dialog flows naturally, and I loved a few of JENNIFER's lines: JENNIFER I don’t have a lover. I’m seeing a therapist. JENNIFER You’re confusing depression with clarity. Personally, I was hoping for a happier ending, but I'm not sure there is one. Well done.
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eldave1
Posted: October 16th, 2020, 3:44pm
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I enjoyed the read, very powerful. The dialog flows naturally, and I loved a few of JENNIFER's lines: JENNIFER I don’t have a lover. I’m seeing a therapist. JENNIFER You’re confusing depression with clarity. Personally, I was hoping for a happier ending, but I'm not sure there is one. Well done.
Thanks, Roger - appreciate it
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Don
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 5:42am
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So, what are you writing?
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SAC
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 6:23am
Of The Ancients
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Good job, Dave. Another notch for the ol belt!
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Yuvraj
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 7:11am
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AnthonyCawood
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 7:29am
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jwent6688
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 7:49am
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Congrats! Really solid script and easy to film. No surprise to see that it’s getting made. Hope they can do it justice. James.
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eldave1
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 4:31pm
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Warren
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 5:05pm
Of The Ancients
A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
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eldave1
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 5:19pm
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LC
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 5:32pm
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Good one, Dave! Very much looking forward to seeing this one too.
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eldave1
Posted: July 1st, 2021, 5:44pm
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eldave1
Posted: March 27th, 2022, 10:42am
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Warren
Posted: March 27th, 2022, 4:56pm
Of The Ancients
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Really great production all round. One to be proud of for sure. Congrats, mate!
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