The Piss Test by Ben Clifford - Short, Drama - An eight-year-old boy accompanies his struggling mother to a court-mandated urine drug-screen, and he recounts everything his mother has taught him over the years - good and bad.  14 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

That was really quick Don. Thanks.

WOW! My God, I have never seen/read such professional writing in all my years! The manner in which you told the story through the eyes/mind of Malakai. Showing his mothers good up bring of him- in that, what he says in remembrance. Mum, and "her past" she brought him up well!      

BRILLIANT!!!

Thanks, Barry. That's some high praise - I humbly suspect once you read more shorts by talented writers your statement will feel much less true to you

Appreciate the read.

Jesus Ben! I gave you a GENUINE praise - that you deserved. I'll say it again, F*cking well done on a brilliant script! This is your post - your script, I, we responding/committing too.  Not others, that can stand on their own feet. Y.  

I'm going to continue... Cause I'm really upset by the small mind thinking (not you Ben, generally speaking). Is this not a site where we are honest to ones writing more than their feelings? If the later? then what are we doing by commenting to say a script is not good... or bad? together with offering advice/assistance. - who are we, just to say "NICE SCIPT" When it in actual fact, sucks! What are we teaching then? Cruel to be kind, right- is it not how we LEARN? It's how I learned. No regrets. Come one... Let's get real! let's be professional An ounce of salt or a bag?  

Ben was probably a bit overcome with the high praise, Barry. I'm sure he's thankful for your heartfelt comment.

In my experience most people on SS do give honest feedback. There's not a lot of comments that praise lacklustre material.

Was just having some fun Baz :p

Thanks, LC. You gotta read that good script of his. I quote you:> In my experience most people on SS do give honest feedback. Yes, we do, sure, it depends who it comes from. hay, I just learned from the best here... Eg: You, LC! Thank you.

I don't know how to delete myself? Please ask Don to delete me , from this site, SS. To you ALL! thank's and keep well - keep safe. God speed!

You keep well.

Regards,
Barry John Terblanche

Don’t worry Barry - I’ve never been good at responding to praise. I really do appreciate your thoughts - sorry if I seemed flippant!

Yes. Come back, Barry!