Hey Simon,
I enjoyed this. Wasn’t what I expected and the twist at the end was well executed and wasn’t what I predicted either.
Some of the writing could be tidied up a bit, especially some of the typos but that’s nothing major. And the only one that really made me do a double take was when WIFE is used in one of the character cues instead of Jen. But that’s the kind of thing you’ll spot when you go back to it with fresh eyes.
Anyways, good stuff.
Cheers
Max |