Heart Isolation by Bernard Antoine Mersier - Short, Drama - On the day of her marriage, a young bride is ready to start her new life, until her fiance ruins her dream, reminding her about a past she hasn’t left in the past. 7 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Thank you for making your script available for the public to read. Your concept works brilliantly in a short film format and there are some profound, personal quotes throughout.

I would have enjoyed a bit more description in the script. What does 'the room' look like? What does "some nice music" sound like? What accent does she have, where is she from, what is her age? I would have loved some help in visualising the scene.

I also noticed in the script that Mayrl references their financé as being their husband before she walks down the aisle (an easily fixable error)

Because the majority of the script is a voice over, it would be nice if the script could just clarify what we are looking at whilst we are listening to this voice. You also used the term "back to the scene" and I was a little confused when reading this as to which scene so again just a little bit more clarification.