I knew there's a reason why I don't live in california.  Greg.

Quoted from greg Anyway, this script has given me a fantastic idea.  Some day I hope to do something like this--to just one kid.  I'll have a bowl full of candy to give out-one of which has been tainted-and give it to some unlucky child.  Oh man.  Haha.

Greg, don't ever drink out of those little bottles in the mini bar at the hotels if the seals are broken. I've heard where some people "taint" them the same way to get out of having to pay  

I sooo know who wrote this!

Terse, descriptive writing with extreme attention to detail, zero mistakes. I LOVE it.

This author is in my zombie script, displaying the same naughtyness and slight touch of evil shown here.

If I'm wrong about the author, well take it as a huge compliment, because he's one of my favorite writers here.

Milk plays such a small role in this script that if this was submitted for any challenge, i'm sure this would fit. It is as if you had a funny idea, - which was funny i'll give you that- and said, "What the hell, i'll just make him drink a little milk to make the script relevant to the task at hand".

I did enjoy it though, because i was wondering what he was going to do with the candy. I though the descriptions were spot on but what's with the little caption at the bottom? Could do without that, but i don't know, maybe you're in the halloween spirit lol. Also the way you've introduced the title is a little weird. Would work better with a title page.

i like the character Old Man Crim, i feel you could extend this and we would laugh more at his antics.
                                             Good Work,
                                                              Robert

Ew.

Well written, brief and to the point.  But...ew.

****SPOILERS****

This one basically just resorts to grossness in place of horror or suspense.

I know the main character is an old man but you still need to put an age in there for clarity’s sake.

The actual writing is technically pretty good except for stuff like this:

“coax the stream forth.” --  haha. This has to be the funniest description of peeing I’ve ever read.

The story is non existent. It’s basically a gross-out scene. Even shorts need to have at least some semblance of a story.

So overall, the script is crafted well on a technical level but is creatively lacking. Doctoring children’s treats is such an obvious device and grossness over story is a common problem with horror scripts/films.

Also, you need to drop the picture at the end. It’s unnecessary and against protocol.

Brea

I agree with all of the obvious points made by others.

More gross that scary.  But I was entertained for 3 pages.
Okay, I got a belly laugh out of the old man's glee in performing such a dispictable act.

I'm surprised that the old guy didn't wake up in the middle of the night, go to the kitchen for some milk and end up drinking his own excess.

Maybe Crim should turn on the TV and hear that some kid died from eating tainted candy.
And then around 4 a.m., a pint-sized Michael Myers comes a calling.
Trick or Treat, Crim-inal.

Fortunatly here in Brazil hasn't Halloween tradition's too! Who wrote this one like a lot of pug...doesn't matter! Well written and gave us mortals the mood how that bastard useless old man did his joke! Next challenge will be Unrine / Terror, won't be?

Ahh

Nasty. I'M officially off tootsie rolls forever. LOL. This was a good read though it doesn't have much to do with milk. Good thing i'm not a trick-or-treater any more cuz i've woulda been overly cautious this halloween. I think i know who wrote this due to an ordinance of words...."Brow furrowing"
this is pretty short to....what a disgusting old fart. But I guess it less worse than razor blades in apples...or is it?

-Shawn

Quoted from Shawnkjr Nasty. I'M officially off tootsie rolls forever. LOL.

I always used to throw the toosie rolls away when I was a kid. Now I'm glad I did.

Eeeewww!!!!

I';ll have to give you props for simplicity and a disgusting streak. This feels more like an urban legend than a horror flick, but the horror here is of a darker, more sinister nature than Michael Myers could ever conjure. My stomach is still churning.

I'll give you a well done, and move along commenting on what a sick puppy you are...

Hmm yes.  Well, I happened to be in a mood to enjoy this.  Another day I might not have been.

Your description was excellent though.  I thought it managed to remain relatively tasteful while still having some kick to it.  It was also ever so sly.  Godo stuff.

Quoted from Don The writers are revealed: Old Man Crim's Holiday Treats by Robert Newcomer

Bert, Bert. What am I going to do with you? I should have known by the word, “palatable” that this was yours. It’s very well written. That’s for sure. But I just never thought you’d write something so…well…disgusting.

This is my official apology to anyone who read this haha.

Like a few other participants, I had a very limited amount of time, but really, really wanted to play.  This is the very first idea that sprang to mind, and was written over the course of a few hours -- off and on.

And I decided to have some fun with the anonymous angle this time --

-- I always seem to get "outed" pretty early on -- so this time I kind of wanted to get bashed -- and set out to do just that.  I even put a picture in it!  How incorrect is that?

"People are going to hate this!" I was chuckling to myself as I typed.

Does any of that make any sense?

So I was kind of surprised when this story found it's small fan-base.  What a bunch of sickos around here....

But I had so hoped for a good Breanne-Bashing -- I had never been on the receiving end of one of those before -- and was so happy to get one!  Thanks, Brea!

And as for the rest of you -- well, you ought to be ashamed of yourselves  

well it's nice to know, Bert, that I am not the only sicko on this site

Do your kids read your stuff, cause I bet if they read this they ain't gonna let you anywhere near their Halloween candy.

Good job though

Quoted from bert I liked it pretty good, though.  A unique one, at least.

I love going back and lookiung what people wrote about their own scripts to throw others off their tales.  I find it exremely amusing.