Hey yo,

this gets a lot of recognition, so why don't take a look what it's about.

I already like the logline but soon I realized that 'the parents' is actually meant in the plural. This context wasn't clear to me from how the logline is worded. And I'd make that clear if I were you, because to me it feels as the even better/higher concept.

p1 a cloudy, winter day (no comma imo)

p2
"and more importantly,why."

The reporter block reads pretty authentic, but I'm not so sure about this last clause. "Why", to me rather sounds as the secondary part of the problem.

P4 the visuals do a good payoff I dare to say

Yeah, it does work imo. The payoff does the job. If I were you, I'd make Gracie a little younger to give a better impression of the thought that 'the snowman' could have been/should have been the one designated for herself.

Because, since I get you right, you play with the eerie metaphor that she is still alive but somehow shouldn't… know what I mean???

And btw this final punchline and impression itself works very well.

Not sure about the age, it's just, that we in Europe have the legal age at 18 and so I myself wouldn't put her so overly clearly into Santa's target audience of the Snowman kids ;-). So, a better contrast with a younger Gracie would fit better imo.

Whatever, this is cool stuff. You paid us off well with some dark atmospheric images here. It's all right.

Best wishes
Alex

Hi!
I am trying to reach the writer to get permission to use this script in a class project. Thanks.

GJ, this one is written by Sean Elwood.
Contact him here:

elwoodsean(at)gmail.com

FYI: Often a Writer's email will be on the title page if the script. If not you can contact Don (like I said on the other thread)
webmaster(at)simplyscripts.com